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    Everlasting

    Eternal

    The big rocks by the seaside,
    Long asleep in it's slumber.
    Whipped by the endless waves.
    It will never wake up,
    even knowing it will end up as sand.

    The trees stood on and grow.
    Doing what it is suppose to do.
    Supporting lives while keeping it's own.
    The leaves that fall down are still of use.
    Brownish leaves that will turn into earth.

    Shiny and bright sun emits it's light.
    Burning itself on and on.
    Raying down the shimmering glow of life.
    Along with countless stars in the space.
    Someday it'll stop it's grace even so,
    it shall never fade till it's time.

    Even if i will grow old with time.
    I will never stop loving you,
    and shall stay patient till the day comes.
    Not knowing when or how.

    I shall engrave and paint,
    my feelings for you on this canvas.
    As long as this part of me remains,
    So will my love for you.

    I'll be here no matter what, just for you.


    Thx to lasura for helping in making this poem and with the title choosing ^^
    totally tired when making this poem..and can't think quite straight...lol ^^

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    Re: Everlasting

    i think it's good. just the right length and all.it's pretty sweet, too. but a little sad.

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    Re: Everlasting

    I love this poem! Very unlike you though- so sweet, loving and... everlasting...
    I like the thing you're trying to say- nothing is everlasting- the rocks will turn to sand, the sun will stop to shine, the trees will die and we... we will die pretty soon, but love will stay after us and it is the thing that is everlasting. ^^ Understood right?

    Anyways, a great work Ray! Different from those I've read before. Hope to see something as good as this in future.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Everlasting

    good job in understanding ^^

    yeah...a little sad...but it's full of hope ^^

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    Re: Everlasting

    "love this poem! Very unlike you though- so sweet, loving and... everlasting...
    I like the thing you're trying to say- nothing is everlasting- the rocks will turn to sand, the sun will stop to shine, the trees will die and we... we will die pretty soon, but love will stay after us and it is the thing that is everlasting. ^^ Understood right?

    Anyways, a great work Ray! Different from those I've read before. Hope to see something as good as this in future." by lasura

    yea lasura is right i love it alot. it had a powerful meaning .it has a good feeling and i love the everlasting feeling. good job!

    hope to see alot more
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    Re: Everlasting

    Lol.. don't sound like me? ^^ what did i sound like?

    well i told u guys imma change my style of writing... ^^ i'll cease down the dark poems..

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    Re: Everlasting

    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    well i told u guys imma change my style of writing... ^^ i'll cease down the dark poems..
    Nooooooooo!!! I want another one dark that seems like if you'd know how it is to die... like "Slowly" or "Posinous Insanity" and "Dripping"!!!! (no dead men though...)

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    Re: Everlasting

    Dark poems made u guys scared.. and made me seem like i was complaining..
    lol but no worries..since there is some1 who wants it.. ^^ i shall fulfill ur request.. i'll continue doing dark poems and try to make a better poem next time or can i do any better than this hmm...

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