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    Of Every Minute

    Second hand ticks, ticks, ticks,
    A frozen scene from a still flick.
    Caught up in another wishful daze,
    Remembering when life wasn't just a haze.
    Instead a life filled with love and devotion,
    When loneliness is no longer an option.
    But it's the best lived dream,
    Eating cookies and ice cream.
    Where being patient is the trick,
    Letting the little clock tick, tick, tick.
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    Omg,



    The best two lines!!!
    But it's the best lived dream,
    Eating cookies and ice cream.
    Although it's short it's very...interesting lol ...Ice-cream xD

    I liked your idea about putting the 'tick, tick' in. Made it sound as if the time was passing very quickly.

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    Re: Of Every Minute

    let's see, this is the first poem of yours that I am reading. so I will give you my honest opinion. Is that ok?

    Well I like the fact that it is a short and detailed poem, so this is to you.
    I think you should have a list of poems put into a newspaper or something.

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    Re: Of Every Minute

    ihauntforlust - well thats what my bf and I would do when together, eat ice cream, which happened to be the cookie dough ice cream :P

    Overload -I do have more poems, this is the first poem I have posted in a long time hence the shortness of it as I tend to get carried away writing too much.

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    Re: Of Every Minute

    I remember the ice cream. Like 3 weeks ago. It was a great poem and I'll see you again soon enough. Other than that, short and to the point. Don't need to many words to say what you mean.

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    Re: Of Every Minute

    My... time is it? (tick tick tick)

    a very good poem... very short...but yet...the description you gave...nice...the flow of is is good.. and... my i love the rhymes..

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