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    Every Moment

    This isn't one of my best SONGS. But, it's alright.


    Last night,
    Stopping by,
    Greeting me with an embracing bad breath.
    Now it's five AM,
    You woke me from a restless REM,
    I think it's time to sober up and die.

    Every little second is time,
    And every word seems to rhyme,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    To make it home alright.
    Now every little second just flies,
    I'll hold to them like paradise,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    I want to fall in love and leave tonight.

    I've been riding in the sunset,
    Ignoring what follows after beauty,
    And fade to black now,
    Just riding in the sunset and this paralyzing cold always comes crawling back,
    I think it's time to sober up and die.

    Every little second is time,
    And every word seems to rhyme,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    To make it home alright.
    Every second just flies,
    I'll hold to them like paradise,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    I want to fall in love and leave tonight.

    Every little second is time,
    And what I wouldn't give tonight,
    To have another second to smile,
    But my dreams are all dead lies,
    I want to be alone and bleed tonight.

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    Re: Every Moment

    Oh my God!!!!!!!!!!! I love this poem sooooo much! I am going to save this to my non existing collection of poetry! Because you inspired me to make one! It may be a lyric. But its still poetry!

    One suggestion!

    Every little second is time,
    And what I wouldn't give tonight,
    To have another second to smile,
    But my dreams are all dead lies,
    I want to be alone and bleed tonight.


    Take that out. It doesnt fit. But it was so awesome. I cant believe its awesomeness! I love the imagery in the street lights!!!!!

    This made me so happy!!!!!!!

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

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    Re: Every Moment

    XD Being an AFI fan for 5 years now... I caught some references to a few songs. I've done something like this in the past. Fun. I'm not sure what I think of this poem. It's okay, though a little bit more of originality would have been preferred. Good job.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Every Moment

    Nice song man,
    Every little second is time,
    And every word seems to rhyme,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    To make it home alright.
    Every second just flies,
    I'll hold to them like paradise,
    I'll follow every word like street lights,
    I want to fall in love and leave tonight.
    I like these line the most.

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    Re: Every Moment

    wow!!! how cool is that yall? i realy like it!!!! lol
    "... And then, a ray of light pierced the darkness. The light turned into a figure of a person who was followed by a fairy, and also held the spirit of the forest..."



    thats great!! thank you!!


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    Re: Every Moment

    I liked all the poem cuz it rimes so cleary.



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: Every Moment

    I'm happy it made you happy, Nympho. Like I said though, it's not my best.

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    Re: Every Moment

    Wow I thought it was really good song I think that it was awesome!
    Awesome job Vincent.
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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