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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    im glad everyone liked this poem it took for ever trying to use stanzas lol and im still working on making the sentces shorter near the end but im sure i will get better
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    i dont know what a stanza is but great job. i suck at poetry.

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    I really liked this poem too.I think alot of people feel that way sometimes.I know i have.

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    yea it sucks to feel that way but you learn to go on with life eventually
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    My smile it could kill you with a bend of my lips in an angry moment

    how the
    world looks ugly from these eye's of hatred you made.

    these were my two favorite parts. youve been hurt by a love as many of us has so you can relate to the audience and ive never heard such a distinguished line as the top one i put on here. it explains the hurt of a simple angry moment, whcih im going through right now, things arent meant whent hey are done out of anger.

    and the next line i added, its horrid how something can change your views, but so true.

    migt wnt to add correct punctuation to b more clear, overall good babe.
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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    i had no idea that you were capable of that kind of artistic expression. i expected everything in your life to revolve around sephiroth and he hd no GF.

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    Nice Poem, it conveys alot of emotion. Overall good work keep it up!

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    Re: Everything You Gave Me!!

    thanks and your right about the my world revolving around sephiroth but i never resolved any thing with my past and that gf i thought i would try with this poem., and thanks for your comment anime girl and im glad that you can see where i am comming from and i will work on my punctuation as well.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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