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    Everywhere (hey i know it not much but......)

    why do i feel
    like everywhere i go
    i cant escape
    the things ive done

    everywhere i go
    it haunts me
    and it taunts me
    why doest it just leave
    If your gonna hate me, hate me for who iam not who you think i should be!

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    Re: Everywhere (hey i know it not much but......)

    short and to the point to be left alone
    everyone thinks this from time to time
    you expressed it will awesome poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Everywhere (hey i know it not much but......)

    Really thanks i thought it was ok.
    If your gonna hate me, hate me for who iam not who you think i should be!

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    Re: Everywhere (hey i know it not much but......)

    short, but still great, i really like it i hope you keep on writting poems like this one.

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    Re: Everywhere (hey i know it not much but......)

    It sounds like a chorus of a song ^^;;

    Maybe you should add a paragraph or more to make it have more of a picture..

    I like the last stanza more, it flows more IMP but becasue its so short you cannot really tell..

    Its a good poem though ^^

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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