Fabricated

*Peach_follows* · Feb 18, 2007, 02:22 PM

With you, I'm intoxicated.
But this is fabricated.
See, in my mind, I've made this.
So I cannot let it be.

There's no magic elixer,
for this dramatic mixture.
So, please don't paint a picture
of what you want me to see.

Let me embrace your flaws.
Sex protected, love is raw.
Frozen hearts can be flawed,
if you let me set you free.

But there is no gradification,
if we can't make a seperation,
between reality and a fabrication.
Which one are you to me?

*Kasai* · Feb 18, 2007, 07:23 PM

Gradification is a word? Very cool. Nice wording and it kept a nice flow.

sangogirl · Feb 18, 2007, 07:29 PM

WOW! very good rhyming. very hard words too. i like it.

*Peach_follows* · Feb 18, 2007, 08:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kasai

Gradification is a word? Very cool. Nice wording and it kept a nice flow.

No. its not... the word is gratification... and I just thought I knew how to spell it, and didn't bother checking. I was wrong....

Not my first spelling error and wont be my last. But thanx for trying to keep me on my toes.

BlueFox1 · Feb 20, 2007, 05:22 AM

Awesome poem! The use of words in this poem keeps the flow steady, and it makes the reader think! Awesome job!

Feb 18, 2007, 02:22 PM	#1 (permalink)
Peach_follows Femmebot's feel nothing. Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Friendly Fridley Posts: 1,026 Thanks: 42 Thanked 32 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 2,204	Fabricated With you, I'm intoxicated. But this is fabricated. See, in my mind, I've made this. So I cannot let it be. There's no magic elixer, for this dramatic mixture. So, please don't paint a picture of what you want me to see. Let me embrace your flaws. Sex protected, love is raw. Frozen hearts can be flawed, if you let me set you free. But there is no gradification, if we can't make a seperation, between reality and a fabrication. Which one are you to me? __________________ Who needs a spray can, when you're a femmebot? http://www.myspace.com/j1gg481tt
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Feb 18, 2007, 07:23 PM	#2 (permalink)
Kasai Domme Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Florida Posts: 2,745 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,490	Re: Fabricated Gradification is a word? Very cool. Nice wording and it kept a nice flow. __________________ Seduced by Flesh
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sangogirl Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: TEXAS Posts: 371 Thanks: 1 Thanked 4 Times in 4 Posts Credits: 4,003	Re: Fabricated WOW! very good rhyming. very hard words too. i like it. __________________
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BlueFox1 Upcoming Legend Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: A place called Midnight Sun know as Tranquility Posts: 584 Thanks: 8 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 1,176	Re: Fabricated Awesome poem! The use of words in this poem keeps the flow steady, and it makes the reader think! Awesome job! __________________
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