fade to black
Life it seems, will fade away
Drifting further every day
Getting lost within myself
Nothing matters no one else
I have lost the will to live
Simply nothing more to give
There is nothing more for me
Need the end to set me free
Things are not what they used to be
Missing one inside of me
Deathly lost, this can't be real
Cannot stand this hell I feel
Emptiness is filing me
To the point of agony
Growing darkness taking dawn
I was me, but now He's gone
I liked your poem. It depicts emotions such as sadness, confusion, hopelessness, loneliness. This poem captured my interest right away. i suggest you to use punctuations. but all in all, this is good. Keep up the good work.
Rhyming is not bad at all... It fits together...
Like a puzzle that was solved...
But every words we're fully absorbed...
thanx for your input.
i will gladly keep up my work.
funny, this is a song by metallica, not your work. it was also covered by disturbed if thats where u copied it from.
Originally Posted by setsuna mudo1617
the songs great, but dont pass it off as your own
I love it. This poem has so much emotion and makes me think of the feelings I hold deep it. Keep it up because this awesome