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    fade to black

    Life it seems, will fade away
    Drifting further every day
    Getting lost within myself
    Nothing matters no one else
    I have lost the will to live
    Simply nothing more to give
    There is nothing more for me
    Need the end to set me free

    Things are not what they used to be
    Missing one inside of me
    Deathly lost, this can't be real
    Cannot stand this hell I feel
    Emptiness is filing me
    To the point of agony
    Growing darkness taking dawn
    I was me, but now He's gone

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    I liked your poem. It depicts emotions such as sadness, confusion, hopelessness, loneliness. This poem captured my interest right away. i suggest you to use punctuations. but all in all, this is good. Keep up the good work.

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Rhyming is not bad at all... It fits together...
    Like a puzzle that was solved...
    But every words we're fully absorbed...

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    thanx for your input.
    i will gladly keep up my work.

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    Quote Originally Posted by setsuna mudo1617 View Post
    thanx for your input.
    i will gladly keep up my work.
    funny, this is a song by metallica, not your work. it was also covered by disturbed if thats where u copied it from.

    the songs great, but dont pass it off as your own

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    I love it. This poem has so much emotion and makes me think of the feelings I hold deep it. Keep it up because this awesome
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