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    fading away

    Fading away is all i see...

    of all the things that are happening to me

    fading away nothing to see

    fading away that is all i will be

    fading away losing everything dear to me

    fading away nothing to be

    fading away is the one known as


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    Re: fading away

    Ooh.. catchy.. @.@ nice use of big fonts and red colour... kinda..emphasizes it more...

    Strong message there...you are fading away it seems....

    I think...it's a very simple poem...but nicely written...since it's short.. the flow is good..and i suggest that you... hmm... use more description on it...tell more how the fading away is...and why...maybe...you dont need to tell it whole...hide it a bit maybe.. use..methaphores? It'll be more poetic that way.. mhm.. ^^

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