Thread: fading away

Ooh.. catchy.. @.@ nice use of big fonts and red colour... kinda..emphasizes it more...

Strong message there...you are fading away it seems....

I think...it's a very simple poem...but nicely written...since it's short.. the flow is good..and i suggest that you... hmm... use more description on it...tell more how the fading away is...and why...maybe...you dont need to tell it whole...hide it a bit maybe.. use..methaphores? It'll be more poetic that way.. mhm.. ^^

Keep it up