Thread: fairy tale...

I'm here to do my duty and be the first one to post!!!!!!!!!!! ^^

This poem is really nice... I rarely see fairy tale stuff around and I really, really rarely read them... But this is nice ^^ I enjoy reading your cute works ^^ they make me feel happy ^^ It's kinda... dreamy... And I love how you end the poem... It's like, I read it, I see what's going on, I think you're talking about yourself, you have a happy and then... @.@ you end it with getting us back to reality... really nice ^^ Hope to see more as always!!!!!!!!!

Grammar polie here for inspection!

Hmmm . . . you don't need a comma after "moment" in the second stanza. "They stare into each other's eyes" might fit better than "she and he stare into the eyes of each other" in the third stanza . . . period after "other" (or "eyes" if you take my advice) . . . and another period after "Her dream has come true."

Very sweet. I hope your fairy tale comes true!!!

this was really sweet! ^_^
Your flow was consistant but a little off in some areas.
Other than that, I loved it