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    Fallen for an Angel

    Fallen for an Angel

    My heart has fallen for an angel from heaven
    Her heart is as loveing and caring as God's love itself
    Her eyes are as welcoming as the light on a warm spring morn
    She is as gentle as a cool summer breeze
    Her hair a golden hue of a fiery bliss
    Her touch is as gentle as her love is pure
    This angel is a blessing from heaven itself
    My love for the angel is as unbreakable and untaimed as the
    wilds of God's great earth
    This angel is a goddess
    and I am just a fool
    Her heart, her beauty, her love, her touch
    has all brought me to my knees
    No matter how strong I become
    I fall harder each day for this angel
    I have become lost in her every way
    This angel is the light in my darkest of days
    bringing me hope of the man I am meant to be
    Making my soul stronger each day
    Her love does that to me
    This angel is my reason for living
    For I was dead inside before she saved me from what I once
    was
    This angel is the one I fell for
    For this angel
    she is perfection in my eyes

    Friends are like Condoms. They're always there for you when things get hard.

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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    I liked the poem. You stayed on the subject of the angel nicely, and you pulled it together in the end with "perfection." Overall, very nice job.
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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    love makes everything perfect i like how you
    descirvribed love in that way.and this poem reminds me alot of
    when i was like that i oove a poem that brings back the good
    memories
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    Thank you. I might post a few more. But most of my poems are more personal.

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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    i really like your poem, but i think it would had been better if you had wrote it in stanzas rather than one whole paragraph.

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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    i agree with ketaro on the stanzas but otherwise it was good.
    not good; REALLY GOOD

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    Re: Fallen for an Angel

    For I was dead inside before she saved me from what I once
    was
    I dont really like the wording of this verse. It seems too long for the poem.
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