Cool beans, my friend. Couple things that would make your story have a lot greater impact, though. Proper punctuation is key. For instance, you use a lot of elipses (the ...). While it's good for dramatic emphasis at certain points, you shouldn't use it too much.
Next is word choice, and you did a pretty good job! However, stear clear of using the world 'then' when describing consecutive actions. Usually you can just drop it entirely and be fine. You only did it twice, but it's a pretty good rule to remember.
Lastly is a dramatic story arc, which is very much present. Something to think about, though, is whether you want to immediately dump everything on the table by explaining that Jeddah, his father, his jewels, and his late mother were all from a foreign planet, his father led a resistance there, his father was diseased, and now he has to go too. You may want to save these for later stories so you have a few stunning revalations for jeddah.
and by all means, post the second chapter