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    Falling and Falling

    After so many years
    I've tried so hard
    To get to the top
    Do better than my best

    I’ve tried so hard
    To fit in with people
    Let people like me
    Get recognised

    To fit in with people
    Be like everyone else
    Not wanting to be different
    I get picked on easily

    Be like everyone else
    Something I've tried
    In some cases succeeded
    It still feels wrong

    Something I've tried
    No one told me otherwise
    Sometimes i felt sick
    Like I should disappear

    No one told me otherwise
    Failure was never an option
    Yet no matter how hard I try
    It still wasn’t enough

    Failure was never an option
    Body pushed to it's limits
    Until one fatal day
    something hit me

    Body pushed to its limits
    No longer could I cope
    Everything changed
    It had to be done

    No longer could I cope
    After so many years
    All fell away completely
    Wasting like decomposing

    After so many years
    It was all for nothing
    Like a ghost with nothing left
    Falling and falling


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    Re: Falling and Falling

    wow that was so freaking sweet, i like the way you wrote this dark poem, i wish i could write poems like that. Keep it up dancy.

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    Re: Falling and Falling

    I especially like how you layered the poem. Great in my opinion.

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    Re: Falling and Falling

    Hey Dancy,

    I'm glad you wrote this...haha, after reading stuff from Nympho and Jaderabbit, this was like a soda after a good jog, very refreshing and easy to follow, I love it also...thanks for the soda,

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: Falling and Falling

    I forgot to mention how good your poem was in my last post so I'm doing it now. Great job on your poem and ejoyed reading it . Keep it up and I hope to see more from you.
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    Re: Falling and Falling

    tis is gd...*grabs popcorn*
    it has a smooth flow to it and it's really meaningful...guess it kinda reflects how every teenager feels. great work ^^

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    wow... this is great! nice theme... people use this theme a lot but you gave yourself an edge by writing this one! keep it up...

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    Re: Falling and Falling

    thank you for the comments.... its my reflection of most things i do.
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