Thread: Falling Through Darkness

Very dark and interesting poem. I liked it it told a good story.

Capitalization and correct punctuation would allow me to read this poem.

Come on Kasai...
It seems like somebody needs a hug ^_^ It's a sad end...

Kasai....that's a very poor excuse not to read someone's poem. Most people do that on purpose..

Incidently I wrote this poem in the eigth grade when I was very happy..I couldn't remember how the rest went so I made some changes..but its still the same...

Originally Posted by Descended From Darkness

Kasai....that's a very poor excuse not to read someone's poem. Most people do that on purpose..

Incidently I wrote this poem in the eigth grade when I was very happy..I couldn't remember how the rest went so I made some changes..but its still the same...

Aw lol.. Can't help laughing when I read what you said XD[1st line]
Anyways, the theme is quite common , death,darkness and all (I write a lot of stuff like that too ) Overall I won't say it's a great poem, merely an OK one for me but your title did captured my attention ^^

Originally Posted by Descended From Darkness

Kasai....that's a very poor excuse not to read someone's poem. Most people do that on purpose..

Kasai has a point, though. You have a great concept running in your poem, but as I read through it, it felt like you didn't even sacrifice some time just to manage the spelling errors, which were quite many and obvious. In any kind of writing, it isn't just the thought of your writing that counts - your grammar and spelling counts a lot as well, as they are the BASIC rules of writing. Next time, please be careful and give enough time to correct the errors mentioned. A well presented poem with regards to spelling and grammar will surely give an impression that you placed your best efforts for what you are posting to the public to read and comment on.

Anyways, like Elie26, the title also captured my attention. The title is well-suited for your poem content, in my opinion, and was able to give me just the right idea to expect in the poem. The good thing is that the title was also supported by your poem content. And with the spelling errors aside, I'd say your poem had been a great read for me. I liked the story you told in the verses, and I was especially impressed with the conclusion. The last stanza definitely gave your whole poem a unique and impressive twist, and exalted the whole poem. Good job!

This is a good poem. I like it.
Though the spelling could be fixed.
But ti was good poem verall.
I really like it. Keep it up