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    Devoted Otaku hiei9957 may be famous one day hiei9957 may be famous one day hiei9957's Avatar
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    ~the Fan~

    when im cold, or when im hot
    The fan makes me what im not
    There no way to explain this thing
    it feels like a big bird flapping its wing
    Low, Medium, and high too
    without the fan i dont know what id do
    Because when im tired its so very soothing
    expecially when it keeps on moving!
    Theres no way i could live without
    keeping you comfy is what its about
    if you have no fan, you're living a lie
    and if you dont plan on getting one
    soon you will die

    Tanks zyta

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    Re: ~the Fan~

    wow that is an intersting poem ther Hiei. good job I like the way it rimes. keep up the good work.
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    Re: ~the Fan~

    First let me say You have a great sig there!

    Very nice poem. I like it.

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    Re: ~the Fan~

    ok its a good poem u just need more work on it read over it again because u have a mistake in it ... i know im not onw to say that but i think if u looked over it ,it can be improved good though ill give u a 8/10

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