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    Fangs(poem)

    Here's one I wrote a couple of months ago. Lol like most my poems I'll probable add to it at some point so I don't know if I'm finished writting it.

    If only I could find you
    Then I think I'd be alright
    Maybe if you were here
    Darkness would turn into light

    If I could search 100 years or more
    If I could look the world over
    I wonder if you would be there
    Or if you don't exist

    More than once I've though I've seen
    A glimpse of your face
    But they were all impersonators
    Wolves who would bear their fangs
    As soon as backs were turned

    ---White_Mage88

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    WWWWOOO first to reply. Sorri due i'll be honest. I'm not really feeling this poem. I only felt it till the last stanza. It seems out of place somehow. But tht's my opinion, I'll firgured it out wen I reread it.

    *rereading*

    OOOooohhhhh, now i get it. Links together quite nicely. Good job.

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    I kinda get wat ur tryin to say.... but the message wasn't potrayed as well as it should hav.
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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    Quote Originally Posted by cerebrum
    I kinda get wat ur tryin to say.... but the message wasn't potrayed as well as it should hav.
    Lol looks like it's back to my poetry journal. To tell you the truth I didn't think this one was very good either, but my friend really liked it so I decided to post it.

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    Ahhh i see, tht's alright to post something u show to ur friends n they say it's good. Most of my friends say it's good n jkingly say it's emo.

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    well i think it is a pretty kool poem. Nice one.

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    impressive, i couldnt right a poem if my life depended on it, so i admire people that can write like you.

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    Re: Fangs(poem)

    Good poem.
    But please dont see wolves as bad animals ok.

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