its a cool poem. but a brain tease because you don't know if you meant to write some words of it they are spelling mistakes
When we stand here
We don’t gave a care in the world
But then we are so far apart now
We care about the world and how far apart we now are
So we have tried to get back together we just got farter
Falling apart....being farther apart from each other, missing someone, loosing touch, changing to the point of having nothing more in common, picking a different path than another, choosing to live life differently, remembering an aching emotion that is not resolved and that could never be, that is what I just felt.
I agree that there are qutie a lot of spelling errors, the poem is quite short and well, you repeat quite often far apart or something like that. Let the idea dwell in your mind, let it flourish or simply move you enough to take your time and express it care. Though you can also write it the way you like, but for its comprehension, it's best to write well if you want a positive comment here and there....knida
lol thanks and thats kinda the fell i was goin for lol
and thank you both for the lovely comment and sorry about the spelling i did try to inprove it sorry
That's a nice poem. Keep up the good work and I look forward to reeading your next one.
awwwww thanks every one ^_^