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    Fate has it Made

    Fate has it made, it is what's in charge
    Like a ship lost at sea, a lowsy fisherman's barge
    I yield to its every move, I am at its mercy
    What I do next is almost impossible to foresee
    It has an iron grasp on my sands of time
    When will I die, Fate has me blind
    What is it that I will grow up to do
    Only Fate can tell me that answer too
    So onward i rock, the fisherman's barge
    Because Fate has it made, it is in charge
    If it wills me to sail to the end then be it so
    The way of Fate is all that I know

    -Christopher Nguyen (theres a bunch of me but thats ok =P)
    -April 15, 2007

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    Re: Fate has it Made

    Hmmm. The sentences have sooo much information in them.. and no punctuation. Giving us some stanzas would allow the poem to breathe and it wouldnt feel as if it's all scrunched up.
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