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    fates twist

    Blood drips to the floor as
    the flesh is split by the blade,
    a head fall's to the floor , a silent
    scream never heard , horror's flash
    but for a second then there is nothing.

    A man walks on as the hallway gets
    dim and a candle goes out with the winds
    breath as foot steps echo on the wet floor,
    a heart beat quickens as murmurs are heard
    as a hand is raised with intent.

    sweat beads as he approaches the corner
    and finds he fate as 2 people stand there guarding
    a way into the next chamber , he thinks to him self
    with a smile that everything gained and those he lost
    have brought him to this moment.

    he slolwy walks from the shadows as he speaks
    words that could be his last as he ready's him self
    for the time his life has brung him to.

    this poem is about taking a moment and embracing
    it like it was your last and making sure it counts.
    its difrent from other poems but any comments or
    suggestions are welcomed.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: fates twist

    Bro this poem is awesome, it like your telling a story! The image it presents is awesome. I can picture it as I read it good job and I'm definitely looking forward to more from you!

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    Re: fates twist

    i love it! it does tell a story and i think that u really nailed it! its dark and scary yet you can read it over and over and get a new pic in your haed!

    IN THE END IT DOSENT EVEN MATTER

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    Wow...I'm left speachless here big bro!! This was amamzing and so awesome!!! The story that it presented was dark and wonderful!! Awesome job as always big bro!!
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    Very... umm... vivid. I like it. BlueFox1 is right. it does seem like you are telling a story. Dread.
    Life's short so have a laugh about it

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    It is a great poem sweetie. I could imagine what was happening as I read it. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read your next one.
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    I liked it alot it was really good n u could imagine it as u read it......hope to read another...
    Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday

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    Re: fates twist

    Well Holder I liked this it's alittle darker then I'm used to reading from you and change is something of a good thing. Keep up the good work and I can't wait to read the next one.
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