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    Fatherless Son

    Time past unshared
    I was never prepared
    The journey is long...
    But I stay strong
    Its hard when you don't know how to belong.

    Ripped out of my existence
    Full of all my persisence
    Learning life alone
    Trying to get by on my own
    Its not really shown.

    Time passed by
    And I'm still shy
    Just quitely move on
    From morning till the end of dawn
    Life is becoming a yawn.

    Poof I'm gone!

    THE RULES!

    I'm on my grind in search to find whats on my mind, its one of a kind!

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    Re: Fatherless Son

    I really like it It is well thought out, has good rhyme and expresses how hard it can be to find your way through life alone
    Sword in hand, fire in heart, I walk towards my future just playing my part.
    The school of the undefeated East! The winds of the king! Zenshin! Keiretsu! Tempa! Kyoran! Look! The East is burning red!” (G Gundam)
    Ride Fast, Live Free & Stay strong.

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    Re: Fatherless Son

    yes, it tells how one must get threw life alone, but no matter which way you take you end up in the same place. i love it.

    within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.

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    Thanks for the replies.

    The journey maybe long but the destination is paradise

    THE RULES!

    I'm on my grind in search to find whats on my mind, its one of a kind!

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    Re: Fatherless Son

    it is very good and is indeed well wrote, you are a good poet.

    within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.

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    Re: Fatherless Son

    I liked the poem, it was wery good. keep up the good work. Btw please check out my poem.

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    Re: Fatherless Son

    WOOOOOOW!!!! ITS AWESOME! U SHOULD KEEP WRITING MORE. sometimes its hard to have a parent but u gotta put ur head up and keep moving on to make a better life. cuz in all, u dont live ur life for someone else.. u live it for urself.


    GOOOOD JOOOOOOB!!!

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