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    Slippery When Wet~ Trampoline Tricks 2 Champion, Togy Ball Champion highteckdudu is off to a good start highteckdudu's Avatar
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    the feeling inside

    It is hot outside, and almost nightfall,
    People who she ‘thought’ were her friends
    Circle her with their fun and games.
    She sits on a boulder righting a story in her notebook,
    A story of fulfillment, and wishes,
    While she waits for someone to call her name to play.
    She hears no sound, fears no voice.
    It starts to sprinkle, rain, and then downpour.
    The people don’t care; it’s all fun to them,
    The laughter gets louder with each and every pound of a rain drop,
    The rain is soaking her clothes, and trickling down her body.
    No one notices her tears because they are mixed with the rain.
    She sits and stares at her paper with the little sunlight that is left,
    As the rain washes away her ink filled words,
    Her paper becomes a vast blotch of pure
    ‘Emptiness’


    I was inspired by a good friend of mine to put this up. I actually had this one for a while like 2 or 3 months. so this is my first one I put up any where, don't count on more comming, I'm not the best at poetry, and I dont do a lot of it, it's just not my style. But please be honest on what you think! Thanks


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    Re: the feeling inside

    Wow highteckdudu that was...... good. I couldnt stop reading it. good job. and you are good at poetry keep it up.
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    thank you! Kindly Ichigo_6 I will try but dont keep your hopes up! I thank you for your feedback.
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    your welcome and dont forget that even if no one see your tears, I will becausae I am the friend that does that.
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    Who said it was about me? Any who thank you! I'm pround to be your friend! ^.^ You keep up the good work on yours too!
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    Re: the feeling inside

    that was a great poem it almost made me tear and the same time it was cool too, please think of more to write i like your work.

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    Re: the feeling inside

    That was amazing... I've never seen anything so.. so... true. I've done that before... and it hurts... The things people go through now a days... no one really notices it because it's everywhere and to them it's normal but it's not.

    I liked it a lot and even though you say you won't.. I'd love to see more.

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    Thank you nalevankomichael and AngelicDemon201092
    That was kind of you both! Thank you~! If I can conger up another good one I might put it up! ^.^
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