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Jun 09, 2008, 11:11 AM
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 Banned  | The feeling of loneyness the feeling of loneyness wonders in the emptyness of my heart the hope of love fades away in to sadness and anger i run from hope because i know there no one on this earth that was ment to love me i wonder when i will fall in to the pit of forgetfullness the gleam of hope i have left islike a loney rain drop in a mid-summers day well ya i guss its how i feel ok thx for listening |
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Jun 09, 2008, 06:15 PM
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 Credits: 14,011 | Re: The feeling of loneyness it is good I'm not saying it isn't but a comon thing that is buging is the format ofthe poems... your poem of exp... is in three lines yes? the poem itself could be broken up into manny lines... and if you deside to leave it al 3 lines them there is almost always: Quote:
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