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    A Few of My Haiku

    Sun shines on the pond
    The frog hops on the lily pad
    Lazy summer heat

    The creamy conch shell
    The vast blue sea unfolds to me
    I watch the sun set

    Drawing on the wall
    Flower petals and black crows
    Dance in the light breeze

    I really like these three, they are the three out of the four of my haiku's that didn't get thrown away.
    (I threw them away...)
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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    Cool...as much as I love the Japanese culture for some reason I have never read much haiku. From what I have read though your last one is probably by favorite..it's very good. I give it a 10/10 ^-^
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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    I like the middle one... Creates a scene of a beautiful sea-side painted in pink... wonderful!!!

    Why did you throw them all away!!!??? That's crazy... I bet there were some just as good as these and maybe even better... ahh... what a pitty!!!

    I enjoyed reading these haiku and I'll be waiting forward for other!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    I love haiku! Especially yours. It makes my haiku pale in comparison. ^_^ Good job!


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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    Uwaah!!!
    I am overjoyed to hear such responses and feel that I will have to dig through my trash....oh yeah...the trash cans were emptied already...
    Anyway, I'll make sure to create more wonderful haikus and post them for your enjoyment!
    Thank You All!!!
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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    i like them, but remember the 5-7-5 rule! your second line on your 1st and 2nd haiku has 8 syllables instead of 7! make sure to check and double check!

    ^o^ good job!

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    Re: A Few of My Haiku

    Oh, thank you for telling me that!
    I'll make sure to revise them right away!!!
    If your happy and you know it make a kitty!!! =^_^= <Meow!

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