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    Fire

    Fire

    Cries in the middle of the night
    Hang in the silent air
    Noise coming closer
    A scream is heard

    Waking up to a terrifying smell
    Coughing as I sit up straight
    Looking over to find him next to me
    The beds empty I start to shake in panic

    Someone help me I scream out
    Choking on the words and smoke
    Searching for the door
    Stumbling over things

    My eyes being singed by the ash and smoke
    Grabbing for the door nob trying to pull it open
    My hand flying back in pain blisters forming on my hand
    I scream in agony trying to get out of the room

    The noise is getting louder as the rooms starts to sway
    The heat taking it's toll on my head.
    I'm being smothered by the clouds of smoke
    I sit in a corner not certain I'll make it out alive.

    My vision getting worse until everything goes black
    My body is useless and weak not able to move
    I hear myself in the back of my mind
    Get up you need to get out of here, he's waiting

    I hold onto my life by a thread
    Someone pulls me out of my burning home
    My life for the past three years going up in flames
    Nothing can replace the things I lost

    I scan the crowd from the back of the ambulance
    Searching for his face not seeing him there
    I feel a tug on my hand and as I look over there he is
    My body rejoicing my mind not knowing what to do

    He holds me close in his arms tears streaming down his face
    He tells me that he loves me and he will have to leave for a while
    I pull back not knowing what he meant by that
    I look back at the house now engulfed in flames

    The men are coming out of the house carrying something
    I look at him and tell him I will be right back
    As I get closer to the men his body are in their arms
    I turn around and see he is no longer in the ambulance

    I fall to the ground screaming it's not fair
    He was just right there beside me he held me close
    Is this what he meant when he said he was going away?
    I sob uncontrollably as the neighbor takes me in her arms

    I ride with his body to the hospital holding his burnt hand
    The men tell me he went back in for me after they said no
    He didn't give up on me when every one said I was a goner
    Yet he was the one to die and I survived the fire

    Days later I started getting sick not able to keep anything down
    My mother had told me to come stay with her after the fire
    I scheduled an appointment with the doctor to see what was wrong
    I don't feel the same though it could be because he's gone

    The doctor looks me over just to make sure I was ok
    He took blood samples to see if I was fine
    I sit in the room silently my skin feeling like ice
    Waiting for the doctors results to the test he ran

    Not expecting what he was about to tell me I was pregnant
    We had so desperately tried to have a baby in the last year
    I never thought I would have to raise the baby on my own
    What was I to do I had to start all over but with out him

    My life didn't seem complete without him by my side
    Now to raise our child would be so hard but it's a blessing
    I still have a piece of him to love and watch grow
    Though he will never get to know his father personally

    Through all this pain of loss and grieving
    Something came out of it that I would never give up
    Why can't he be here to help me raise our child
    I have to travel this road alone it is now my job

    His memory will always be with me
    He will always be in my heart and thoughts
    My last moments with him will always bring me sorrow
    Yet they will always let me have peace

    He's waiting for us my child and me
    Waiting for us to come home
    To be a family once again
    Till then I will do my best and hang onto life

    I don't know what this is all about.
    ™Mommy To Micah And Shawn!™


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    Re: Fire

    That is such a sweet and touching story. It was so brave of him to risk his life to save hers eventhough it didn't end so well. It's really sad that he didn't get to see his baby. I'm sure he would've been so proud of it. This seems like a true story. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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    Re: Fire

    Awesome poem Ky! I agree with Cherryblossom18 that it is a sad story, but the imagery you put into this poem is awesome! I can actually see this happening as I read it! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: Fire

    Thanks guys for your comments. I know it was more like a story then a poem but I wanted it to be a poem. I had part of the poem written before I started typing and the rest was something I just thought up.
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    Re: Fire

    Nice poem u have done there its a sad one i must say and long too but i liked it.
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    Re: Fire

    Well thank you baby I'm glad that you liked it. I didn't know what to do really and this is what I came up with.
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    Re: Fire

    Well it came out great and im glade u posted it up.
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    Re: Fire

    Hmmm, same poem on the other site........you know what that means, I'm gonna post the same message, lol.

    "toooo long, great, but loooooooong. Might not be able to get everyone to read it all. For those that do, it is good. "

    Mwahahahahaha enjoy the same post, lol. And to say again, I liked it.
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    Because they have obtained that level they are arrogant. You have to kep in mind when you talk about these guys they are kind of dorks who probably didn't excel at much and this is their only outlet to flex their muscles. Their egos would suffer no less so the the forum suffers some more. Watch one way or another they will probably repond to this post with a threat. But there are better forums out there. Private messege Zev.

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