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    Fire and Angel

    This poem is a combination of both myself and Shinigami's Angel. I hope you like it because we had fun making it!lol



    Fire within burns with desire,
    Tempered to keep it in check.
    Explosive if handled incorrectly,
    Seductive when stroked properly.

    I moan as you take a hold of my heart.
    I’m chained to your bed, with a red ribbon around my neck.
    You touch me with feather-like touches, I can hardly contain myself.
    I beg you for release, but you just tease me all the more.

    Fueling the urge to set myself free,
    You run your fingers across my lips as you make me gasp.
    Passions now impossible to control.
    I throw my head back and scream.
    Last edited by fireandice; Jan 27, 2008 at 09:38 PM.

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    Re: Fire and Angel

    I love the title Fai!!! We did an awesome and amazing job!! ^___^ Love love love love it!! ^___^ We soooo work well together!! ^___^
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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    Re: Fire and Angel

    Wow that was compeletely new I like it however it was random and I didnt really get the meaning great job though.
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    Re: Fire and Angel

    Whoa.....you know......this is a very seductive poem.......
    The words are truly amazing an =d they have meaning to them....almost if though the poem is happening in real life.....
    The words go great with the title........
    Amazing job.....
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    Re: Fire and Angel

    "Incorrectly," not in correctly. Feather like should be hyphenated (feather-like). The first line of the last stanza should end with a comma, not a period. I might have missed something. I'm not sure I caught it all.

    Good job, though. A very seductive poem, indeed.

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