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    fire in the heart

    fire in the heart

    my hearts been burning up so much as of late
    i cant seem to understand why i love so many
    yet as i gaze down the path to tommorrow
    i see myself alone and miserable
    i want to love and be loved, yet i cant seem to find the one that will heal this old heart of mine

    im now on fire, as the flames spread out.
    i wish i could find someone that was near me to put me out
    but alas im alone and burning out
    i dont have much time, and the clock ticks my life away
    i fear for my life as i gaze into the blaze

    im burning up with no true love, i fear im destined to be alone
    i cry to try to put out the blaze, but im not strong enough to uphold my ways.
    the fire in my heart is consumeing all the oxygen around me.
    im now suffocating in my own dilema.
    i gasp and grasp for anyone that would save me
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    Re: fire in the heart

    Capitalization and punctuation would make the poem look better.
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    Re: fire in the heart

    you again? dont you get tired of saying the same thing over and over?
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    Re: fire in the heart

    i have to say that was a beautiful peom dude probably one of the best my eys have laid upon . except you burning even though i know it's a metaphor. trust me that would make me fall in love wid ya and i'm a dude.
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    Re: fire in the heart

    i kept thinking of your signature the whole time i read the poem. it is very interesting to think of a skeleton burning up and trying to find love. i like it the metaphore is there and what it stands for is something that i think almost anyone can relate to.
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: fire in the heart

    Quote Originally Posted by god of death View Post

    im burning up with no true love, i fear im destined to be alone
    i cry to try to put out the blaze, but im not strong enough to uphold my ways.
    the fire in my heart is consumeing all the oxygen around me.
    im now suffocating in my own dilema.
    i gasp and grasp for anyone that would save me

    I love this stanza. It's a keeper!

    This poem is so sad..I really like it.

    im now suffocating in my own dilema.
    i gasp and grasp for anyone that would save me
    I love those two sentences. It tells how they're vulnerable to anything, and are capable of getting their heart broken once more, starting the poem all over.

    It's deep and has purpose.

    Nice job! Keep it up!
    Last edited by The White Wolf; Feb 19, 2007 at 01:03 AM.

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    Re: fire in the heart

    wow. thanks people! i do apprecaite your comments. your all very nice, as for my sig i didnt do that on purpose.... though i wish i would have thought about something like that!
    thanks people again, your making me want to write more!
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    Re: fire in the heart

    Oh hello im going to an asylum join me
    hehe..

    Nice poem there man...im afraid i can't do better than u are... lol
    but i will do my best to make a better poem..

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