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    Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    I'm not very good at this, haven't really done much of it before, but I thought I'd give it a shot, so here goes.


    To guide your path on the darkest night, is a distant fire that burns so bright, it is your guiding light.

    The bright shining brilliance of ice, sparkling beautifully as the morning sun shines forth, it's appearance is so nice, one could not measure it's worth.

    In the skies is the rumbling of thunder, striking unpredictably from above, down on all things under...

    ...then there was lightning, scaring every little pup, to take their mind of that which is frightening, give them all a milk filled cup.


    I know, that is like something a little kid would write...but it's my first real shot at it...

    And I know it isn't very long, and certainly not deep, but there it is, Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning. :P

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    I like it wolf, but I feel the rhyming was a little cliche. I like how you slid the title into to your poem though, nice ^^
    Its pretty good for you first try at it, keep it up.

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    Thanks, and I know some of the rhyming was clich&#233;, especially Ice-Nice... <_<

    I'll have to work on something less clich&#233; now. XD

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    Not really. If you feel that thats how poems flow from your head to paper, then do it like that,I still like this one regardless.

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    I knew when I was typing it up though that some of the rhyming was very old, as in pairs of similar sounding words very often used when trying to rhyme. :P

    Just felt like writing a Poem, and since there's a specific section here at AO just for them, I thought I'd take advantage of it, I fail at fan fics though, I've tried several times, but they've all turned out poorly. :/

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    very nice read^^ i liked it=] nice, sweet and straight to the point. lol=] flow was kinda choppy but very good^^ cant wait to read more ^^
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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    More? Hm, didn't think anyone'd enjoy it that much, but I'd be glad to do more. What would be a follow up...perhaps Grass and Wind, Joy and Sorrow.

    It'd be a little different, the grass and the wind would lead into the sentences for Joy and Sorrow, as Thunder sort of led into Lightning in this first attempt I made at writing a Poem. :P

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    Re: Fire and Ice, Thunder and Lightning

    however you want to do it^^ these are your thoughts express them as YOU see fit no matter how many replies or views you get for your poems

    take care

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