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    Fire love

    I’ve known you so shortly
    But still I can’t help
    Feeling so strongly
    About how your kiss felt

    Somehow in that moment
    I knew that I loved you
    To lay and be held
    In your arms like glue

    The warmth of your kiss
    On my neck starting fire
    I kissed your hand
    But your lips I desired

    I could have lain
    With you there all night
    But then you left
    I’m alone in the night

    The darkness of absence
    Your absence from me
    I sit and I hope
    That you’ll answer my plea

    I would be bereft of happiness
    If ever I lost your hope and care
    For me to sit alone in loneliness
    Nothing left to fill but despair
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    Re: Fire love

    hmmm i like it...it's good and u should keep up the good work my friend. i like love poems lol don't tell everyone ^^ good work and keep it going^^
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    Re: Fire love

    Thank you very much. I'll try to keep it up
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    Re: Fire love

    it started out as nice and sweet and full of love, then somehow it dropped the emotion into a little despair and darkness... very good! I love the transition you used.... well, just one thing though... the "glue" thing seemed a little distracting... it doesn't seem to fit the poetic words you have started the poem with... great job anyway!

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    Re: Fire love

    A good poem because of the nice smooth transision. The lonliness of love is clearly displayed in this.

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    Re: Fire love

    Great poem, I love the smooth transition from the warmth of love to the bitter cold of night and loneliness, plus allot of the words meshed well together.
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    Re: Fire love

    a poem full of lust after love at first touch. To be with ur loved one n forever lhold them in ur arms. tht is the dream of every lover. Nice one, kee it up.

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    Re: Fire love

    The glue thing was only because I needed a rhyme.
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