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    the first poem i ever wrote

    Dead Heart, Lost Soul

    I leave this world with sadness and despair
    I leave it to the ones who made it so
    I give my bloody heart to my kin of old
    I give my dying soul to the ones I love most
    My darkened corpse I give back to mother earth
    My kindred spirit I give back to sister moon
    Last edited by Raed; Mar 01, 2008 at 02:07 PM.
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    Re: the first poem i ever wrote

    I liked it it was pretty good but one thing you might want to do is not right it in a hard to see color so everybody can see it but good job for a first time poem kepp writing.

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