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    First post here. Be gentle.

    While I -am- a writer. I'm no poet. I never attempt to rhyme so usually it's an accident if it happens and when it does I feel this pulling need to continue and then feel like my writing sounds like a nursery rhyme and scrap it. Because I usually write from frustration and pain. And I don't want that to sound childish.

    However my goood friend Sprout (Know him? He's great!) said I should share my poetry with you fine people. So here's the first I've written in a long time.

    Not posative I'd call it poetry though. I'm always my own worst critic.

    This poem is called Alienation. I wrote it on the fourteenth of may.

    Well I guess I asked for it right?
    It was all my choice.
    As so many of you just can't stand not to remind me.
    Well you were right.
    That makes me wrong.
    Are you happy?
    I don't know what I'm doing.
    Except losing my pretty little mind.
    It's getting worse and worse.
    For me to look behind.
    There is no forward.
    So here I sit.
    Lost and scared.
    Exhausted and beat.
    I wish my mind would just let me be.
    I didn't want to be thrown away.
    But again. I made my choice.

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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    While I -am- a writer. I'm no poet. I never attempt to rhyme so usually it's an accident if it happens and when it does I feel this pulling need to continue and then feel like my writing sounds like a nursery rhyme and scrap it. Because I usually write from frustration and pain. And I don't want that to sound childish.

    However my goood friend Sprout (Know him? He's great!) said I should share my poetry with you fine people. So here's the first I've written in a long time.

    Not posative I'd call it poetry though. I'm always my own worst critic.

    This poem is called Alienation. I wrote it on the fourteenth of may.

    Well I guess I asked for it right?
    It was all my choice.
    As so many of you just can't stand not to remind me.
    Well you were right.
    That makes me wrong.
    Are you happy?
    I don't know what I'm doing.
    Except losing my pretty little mind.
    It's getting worse and worse.
    For me to look behind.
    There is no forward.
    So here I sit.
    Lost and scared.
    Exhausted and beat.
    I wish my mind would just let me be.
    I didn't want to be thrown away.
    But again. I made my choice.
    hmm. i like it.lol Its pretty good actually a little hard to follow though, but its good

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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    Quote Originally Posted by anime_being_god View Post
    hmm. i like it.lol Its pretty good actually a little hard to follow though, but its good
    Yesss. *Grave nod.* that's what happens when I'm a -little- crazy. The mind bounces. I was ranting ...just artistically. ^.^; Glad you liked it!

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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    It's so catchy but confusing but I love confusing ones cause it just makes me read it over and over again! Hope to see more!
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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    Very nice poem. I love it! ^_^ Hope to see more.

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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    Thanks all! I appriciate the feedback. I'll try to be less confusing next time I write

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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    It was really good. kind of reminds me of what I think sometimes. lol anyways taht one is really good. I liked it allot you are a good writer.
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    Re: First post here. Be gentle.

    Y'see? I told ya your poems were great! ^_^ People other than myself like them even. Good job, hon! ^_^


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