First post here. Be gentle.

bratling · May 30, 2007, 12:58 PM

While I -am- a writer. I'm no poet. I never attempt to rhyme so usually it's an accident if it happens and when it does I feel this pulling need to continue and then feel like my writing sounds like a nursery rhyme and scrap it. Because I usually write from frustration and pain. And I don't want that to sound childish.

However my goood friend Sprout (Know him? He's great!) said I should share my poetry with you fine people. So here's the first I've written in a long time.

Not posative I'd call it poetry though. I'm always my own worst critic.

This poem is called Alienation. I wrote it on the fourteenth of may.

Well I guess I asked for it right?
It was all my choice.
As so many of you just can't stand not to remind me.
Well you were right.
That makes me wrong.
Are you happy?
I don't know what I'm doing.
Except losing my pretty little mind.
It's getting worse and worse.
For me to look behind.
There is no forward.
So here I sit.
Lost and scared.
Exhausted and beat.
I wish my mind would just let me be.
I didn't want to be thrown away.
But again. I made my choice.

*anime_being_god* · May 30, 2007, 01:56 PM

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Originally Posted by bratling

While I -am- a writer. I'm no poet. I never attempt to rhyme so usually it's an accident if it happens and when it does I feel this pulling need to continue and then feel like my writing sounds like a nursery rhyme and scrap it. Because I usually write from frustration and pain. And I don't want that to sound childish.

However my goood friend Sprout (Know him? He's great!) said I should share my poetry with you fine people. So here's the first I've written in a long time.

Not posative I'd call it poetry though. I'm always my own worst critic.

This poem is called Alienation. I wrote it on the fourteenth of may.

Well I guess I asked for it right?
It was all my choice.
As so many of you just can't stand not to remind me.
Well you were right.
That makes me wrong.
Are you happy?
I don't know what I'm doing.
Except losing my pretty little mind.
It's getting worse and worse.
For me to look behind.
There is no forward.
So here I sit.
Lost and scared.
Exhausted and beat.
I wish my mind would just let me be.
I didn't want to be thrown away.
But again. I made my choice.

hmm. i like it.lol Its pretty good actually a little hard to follow though, but its good

bratling · May 30, 2007, 02:09 PM

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Originally Posted by anime_being_god

hmm. i like it.lol Its pretty good actually a little hard to follow though, but its good

Yesss. *Grave nod.* that's what happens when I'm a -little- crazy. The mind bounces. I was ranting ...just artistically. ^.^; Glad you liked it!

KuwiRules145 · May 30, 2007, 02:21 PM

It's so catchy but confusing but I love confusing ones cause it just makes me read it over and over again! Hope to see more!

bcvl1124 · May 30, 2007, 03:39 PM

Very nice poem. I love it! ^_^ Hope to see more.

bratling · May 30, 2007, 04:10 PM

Thanks all! I appriciate the feedback. I'll try to be less confusing next time I write

Ichigo_06 · May 30, 2007, 04:19 PM

It was really good. kind of reminds me of what I think sometimes. lol anyways taht one is really good. I liked it allot you are a good writer.

*atomik_sprout* · May 31, 2007, 06:14 AM

Y'see? I told ya your poems were great! ^_^ People other than myself like them even. Good job, hon! ^_^

May 30, 2007, 12:58 PM	#1 (permalink)
bratling Upcoming Legend Join Date: May 2007 Location: Crystal Minnesota. Posts: 500 Thanks: 0 Thanked 14 Times in 14 Posts Credits: 11,174	First post here. Be gentle. While I -am- a writer. I'm no poet. I never attempt to rhyme so usually it's an accident if it happens and when it does I feel this pulling need to continue and then feel like my writing sounds like a nursery rhyme and scrap it. Because I usually write from frustration and pain. And I don't want that to sound childish. However my goood friend Sprout (Know him? He's great!) said I should share my poetry with you fine people. So here's the first I've written in a long time. Not posative I'd call it poetry though. I'm always my own worst critic. This poem is called Alienation. I wrote it on the fourteenth of may. Well I guess I asked for it right? It was all my choice. As so many of you just can't stand not to remind me. Well you were right. That makes me wrong. Are you happy? I don't know what I'm doing. Except losing my pretty little mind. It's getting worse and worse. For me to look behind. There is no forward. So here I sit. Lost and scared. Exhausted and beat. I wish my mind would just let me be. I didn't want to be thrown away. But again. I made my choice.
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