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    flowers

    roses are red

    roses are red violets are blue
    how long will it take for me to be with you

    dafadils are yellow black tulips are...well... black!
    the time we spend apart feels like a heart attack

    lilacs are green lilies are pink
    if this goes on will our love ever sink?

    a lotus is purple a prisma is as white as a dove
    I do not need flowers, only your love

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    I think it's ok!
    first attempt at a poem that's not school related
    tell me what you think!!

    bii!!
    "act the way you want to be and soon you'll be the way you act"

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    Àddïctëd tø |ăüghïñg :) Sonny Sunshine Champion, Volcano Champion, Aquarium Sprengischen Champion, Spiderman Web of Words Champion, Look Alive Champion iluvmyloser is off to a good start iluvmyloser's Avatar
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    Re: flowers

    very good.good job with the description.and keep it ↑ cant wait to hear more
    Yeah, Bye.

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    Re: flowers

    Wow! If this is your first attempt, its a sure fire sign that you should keep writing. Very clever, very cute.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: flowers

    Wow I didn't think it was all that goof =)
    but maybe it was, I have to say I'm very talented =P
    but that idea came to me while reading all the other poems here on AO
    If another comes I'll definently go with it =D

    bii!!
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    Re: flowers

    Following in my footsteps Fuj? Jk. Not bad for a first try. It's a nice addition to an old classic.


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    Re: flowers

    Classic poem, Classic poem with a new edge.
    Well done and please write more for us to read,
    btw can you please tell me where you got the black tulips?

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