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    flying kites. (another stab at non-rhyming)

    Happy people flying kites. So colorful, so bright.
    All you see is gray.
    You lost the game of catch. Now you can't get your heart back.

    You can no longer bestow your love apon another.
    Its is tarnished.
    You so foolishly let all your valuables be manhandled.

    Mistakes can't be undone. So you sit here, dumbly numb.
    Tasting your defeat.
    Salty tears, soften your face. Close your eyes.

    You can hear everyone laughing as the wind blows.
    The joke's on you.
    Embarrassment raises your body temperature. 'Tis all thats left to warm you.

    The world is so cold. The wind is wicked. Others would freeze.
    You feel nothing.
    Just turn up the collar on your coat. They're sailing your soul in this wind.

    People join in on the game. Your hearts being tossed around.
    If only you could fly away.
    But, up there, is your soul. So close to the heavens, but still on a string.

    You once shared yourself, so frivolously. Not a care, just like them.
    With one gust of this wind.
    You dropped your heart. Let go of your soul. Now, both are in anothers hand.

    All you see is gray.
    It is tarnished.
    Tasting your defeat.
    The joke's on you.
    You feel nothing.
    If only you could fly away.
    With one gust of this wind.
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    Re: flying kites. (another stab at non-rhyming)

    very cool poem and the heart is a fragile
    thing that many take for granted and this pome
    realy point this out and i like that because not everyone
    understand the matters of the heart but you made to where
    people can see it from your point of view.

    i cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: flying kites. (another stab at non-rhyming)

    Quote Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice View Post
    very cool poem and the heart is a fragile
    thing that many take for granted and this pome
    realy point this out and i like that because not everyone
    understand the matters of the heart but you made to where
    people can see it from your point of view.

    i cant wait to read another
    Thank you for being kind... this was a step out of the box for me. I find it a challenge to produce poems that DON'T rhyme. I'm always worried they won't be any good. Its funny because when I re-read this poem... I noticed some subtle rhymes. I rhyme accidently... who knew...
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    Re: flying kites. (another stab at non-rhyming)

    A really interesting poem, peach. I especially liked how it all tied down together at the end. You have introduced a different way of writing poetry to me, peach. Nice work.

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