Thread: Focus

Ahhh... just what I needed in this moment.... I was going all depressed here... I knew I can count on Anime Online poem section ^^ Thank you crystalann for saving me this evening ^^

Well I like what you're trying to say, it's great to see someone talking about a bit more general things in life, about quite serious things in life... I really enjoyed reading this and indeed... it saved me from lots of depression this evening

Well there were some language problems, such that I don't want to fight with them, go through them telling where I think it didn't sound good- it'll come with time! Write more!!!! I hope to see more ^^

WoW! Great job, seems opposite of what i do though, see i look at the bad things because when io look at good things and they dont work out, i alwasys end up feeling hurt, so if i look at worse case senario then all works for me, but i am positive at times! keep up the work!

Lasura thank you for your comment
and I am glad that I could help you
feel free to point out any language promblom and i will fix them asap
thangs again for commenting.


highteckdudu thank you for comment as well
some time it work and are time is does not
it just trail and error in the end they fall into place .
thanks agian for the coomment

Yes that is a great poem and very good advice to everyone. However might I offer a few suggestions. !st off try to keep the stanzas even (move a line or two up) for example in Stanza 1 you might want to add a line to this
Don’t step back into the past.
Always go forward with your dreams.
Focus on the good and not the bad.
might I suggest this line added,
For bad can always lead to worse
And in the last stanza
All we have to do is stay focus,
yes there are time that it may be hard to maintain focus.
But just remember this,
Nothing is ever out of reach.
The dreams you have will happen with time.
might I suggest taking out the first line and rewording the second to being
All we have to do is stay focus,
Just remember this; Nothing is ever out of reach
One last thing in the 3rd stanza you might want to try rewording it to
To stay on point toward your goal you must tell yourself,
I can do this and reach my goal,
And nothing is ever out of my reach
All I have to do is believe in myself and I can accomplish anything.
good job on the poem again but try and see what these suggestions do for yah you may inhance it quite a bit. Keep it up.

i will read them and try to work them in some how
thank you for the comment and the suggeutions as well
thanks again it great help