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    Foot Step

    That first step,
    As a young babe.
    Those steps that sarted
    an avalanch thrust tword yourself.

    The time you felt
    like you were the fastest.
    When you could race around
    the world.

    Now you see what you started.
    You started a Jorney,
    Of love and hate,
    of loss and saddness.

    But all is not lost,
    But there is still hope.
    You can fight,
    You can force it back.

    You can't take the steps back
    but you can work and try.
    Try to be somthing bigger.
    Try to be somthing Important.

    Those first steps
    as a baby,
    Just a baby,
    Started somthing bigger

    Be bigger
    Be stronger
    Be important
    Take the first step
    Take the last.
    Take the next step
    And make it last.

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    Re: Foot Step

    I really liked this poem. The first stanza grabbed my attention, and the others held it until I got to the ending one, which wrapped it up really well. I liked it very much!
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    Re: Foot Step

    This poem is really kool, your first stanza was really nice.

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    Re: Foot Step

    Very nice. ^^ Hooks the reader and keeps him/her with it 'til the end. ^^

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    Re: Foot Step

    Hmm, elaboration would have been nice on the poem. I know I say this for almost every poem I read. >.< But it's because a lot of the poems lack description. I really love description in poems.
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