I really liked this poem. The first stanza grabbed my attention, and the others held it until I got to the ending one, which wrapped it up really well. I liked it very much!![]()
That first step,
As a young babe.
Those steps that sarted
an avalanch thrust tword yourself.
The time you felt
like you were the fastest.
When you could race around
the world.
Now you see what you started.
You started a Jorney,
Of love and hate,
of loss and saddness.
But all is not lost,
But there is still hope.
You can fight,
You can force it back.
You can't take the steps back
but you can work and try.
Try to be somthing bigger.
Try to be somthing Important.
Those first steps
as a baby,
Just a baby,
Started somthing bigger
Be bigger
Be stronger
Be important
Take the first step
Take the last.
Take the next step
And make it last.
I really liked this poem. The first stanza grabbed my attention, and the others held it until I got to the ending one, which wrapped it up really well. I liked it very much!![]()
A white rose no longer alone
I know who's heart it is to represent
I didn't pick it, but i let it grow
For he's the one that's heaven sent. : I love you, my White Rose.: The Poop Forums
This poem is really kool, your first stanza was really nice.
Very nice. ^^ Hooks the reader and keeps him/her with it 'til the end. ^^
Hmm, elaboration would have been nice on the poem. I know I say this for almost every poem I read. >.< But it's because a lot of the poems lack description. I really love description in poems.
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