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Reply With QuoteThe poem seemed... rushed. Longer stanzas filled with description would have made it flow better.
All things doesn't last,
Time passes by so fast,
Leaves fade away,
We will soon find our way,
The way of our doom,
Somewhat like a loom,
But before I go,
I want you to know,
My last letter,
Even though bitter,
THat my love for you,
And only you,
Will last FOREVER...
The poem seemed... rushed. Longer stanzas filled with description would have made it flow better.
Seduced by Flesh
It's a really short poem kasai...I'll edit it if you want..^_^
This poem was short. If the stanza's were longer you gotten the true emotion out there a little more. Other than that it was great at least your feeling were in there!
Keep up the good work!
BlueFox1
short and stanza's aside i liked this poem for what it represent
and that all i realyl care for wheni read a peom it has to be about
life nothing fake ,this poem was about life wich made it awesome
great poem
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
Isolate and save you from yourself
i lov it so much so ya you need to kepp th work up
When you walk away
You don't hear me say please. Oh baby, don't go
Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go
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