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Aug 09, 2006, 10:56 AM
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 Credits: 110 | forever sorrow yo its my first poem on line i dont know how good it is but what do you guys think? forever sorrow ,saga one. i feel lost i feel empity my life is left without meaning my heart is full of sorrow i love you with all my heart and soul only if you new how much you were my light my deliverance from it all you made me hole we become so close now you decide things ant ment to be i grow hollo i become a shadow my fury boils into streams of blood my soul blackens i become legion my lost love fuels my rage a rage unseen unheard until the day i wilt and break i strike at those who oppose me like a man possesed my anger flows threw me it makes me powerfull i burn all kill all take all i become war itsself my hope my light is fadeing....... Last edited by Ju jitsu Dan; Aug 09, 2006 at 11:19 AM. |
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Aug 09, 2006, 11:04 AM
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Credits: 3,202 | Re: forever sorrow very cool how you described rejection and how it can affect you .i have had that feeling once my self along time ago. and venting like you did taking it out on everyone becuase your love was thrown away very awesome. i like this poem and that what i got from this not sure if thats what you meant but i got that impression |
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Aug 09, 2006, 11:21 AM
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Credits: 3,202 | Re: forever sorrow yea i know and you can call me chris if my nic is to long and i cant wait to read another poem that one was great |
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Aug 09, 2006, 12:07 PM
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Credits: 3,202 | Re: forever sorrow ok then Dan if you eer want to join the noob clan you can just pm me when ever you feel like you want to join |
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Aug 09, 2006, 01:04 PM
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Credits: 3,202 | Re: forever sorrow thats all anyone can do and you did pretty good with this poem |
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im all ready working on another but i need to fine tune it,and its slightly diffrent.
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