Cool poem Sini!!
hope things go well
Take my hand in yours
as we walk down the street
Take my love I offer you
as we sit under the stars.
Take my kiss I give you
As I say I love you
Take my heart that beats
As its already yours
Take my life that I would give
To see that you live another day.
Take this Ring I offer the woman I love
As I am forever yours till the end of time.
I wonder if this is a little something written for a proposal by any chance?
If so, it's simply and sweet, though to make it more romantic, you could try to make it rhyme and all, but that would demand looooooots of time to work on it so it doesn't get too cheesy. I didn't know you wrote things like that....I guess even admins write sometimes
Beautiful poem and a very original way of writing it! If it is a proposal poem it is very well written, each line express your emotion perfectly! Outstanding job writing this one! I hope to read more of your work!
Thanks for the comments ^_^