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    Forgive but dont Forget

    Step on me
    Step on me
    Grind me to the bone
    Because from this pain
    Knowledge grows

    I'll forgive you
    Your anger and "mistakes"
    But I'll never forget
    Waiting
    Watching
    Just one mis-step
    any excuse for me to strike
    I'll take you down with no regret

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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    Ahh the poem means significant to me because i promise not to hurt no one and there is also a big hope into not making fell bad to that person i admire your poem, and keep it up i would recommend you to see more in the future.

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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    Rally nice poem i like it and can relate to being treated like a dog.It is truely a glimps into the minds of thoes how abuse and are abused.I really like it.

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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    I like this poem!!! It just feel exactly the same like you said it but it's kinda hard to believe so I hope to see more!!!
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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    It was good. It seemed a little cliche though..and short. Making it a little bit longer would have made it alot better. All in all though it was good, I give it a 6 and half out of 10. ^-^
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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    Ooooh thanks guys for your coomments >.<
    I actually prefered to keep it short and simple
    but the critique is appreciated

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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    There is nothing wrong with short poems! You do some awsome stuff with your poems. I have wanted to do a poen like this for a while and you hit the nail on the head.


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    Re: Forgive but dont Forget

    Like the poem. Very cool. Hope to see more like that one.
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