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Reply With Quoteit was really good I especially liked the last line
The Forsaken
Forever forsaken, forever neglected... appraise my being.
Walking juries display fake expressions... wandering eyes,scrutinize.
Their presences putrify my soul.
Their hard gaze stain my every being.
My Memories drown in deception and deceit.
Eyes saturated in hatred.
Let it burn and drain away my sanity.
Jagged edges pierce and enhance my despair.
I surrender to the anguish... I welcome the foul, crimson red sputtering from damaged wounds.
- Destruction is bliss -
Let the stench purify my soul and intoxicate my spirit.
Stream away from me
... lift me
... Set me free
In death, my flesh and existance is condemed to an eternity of despair.
Forever forgotten... Forever forsaken.
But my soul remains, lifted.
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Okay I'm no poet, as you can clearly see. But this piece itself potrays a significant message. Haha, you try figuring it out... it should be simple enough.
Feel free to comment and quote all my 'Grammatical errors'.lol.
Reesy's life goal : "To corrupt the mind of an innocent monk" - CHECK!! lol. ^_^Originally Posted by kedar
Purity level drops 10 %!!! All thanks to Reese! (¬_¬/¯ [Reese]! ^_^
Last edited by Reese; Jun 21, 2006 at 04:48 PM.
it was really good I especially liked the last line
WHATISTHATBIGLONGBUTTONONTHEBOTTOMOFTHEKEYBOREDFOR !?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!
OMG! ¬_¬ Oh my Divine God!!! You funny [sweet] duckie!!! ^_^
That significant message you speak of, is rather obvious to me, you just want me to make you pure and set free from the so worldly, excruciating bondages, ne? I shall lift Reesy, and set her free. ^_^ With all Seriousness, this poems of yours is simply amazing, I love it, all throughout!! The meaning is beautifully portrayed and I can certainly sense the evil overtaking sweet Reesy's mind, hahaha. Come to me, for I shall make you good and pure again!!! Reesy gets a 10/10 for this awesome poem!!!
Ehehehe, I have a few things to point out, though, only minor stuff.
On line 3, I believe you meant to say putrefy, not putrify. (^_^)~~! Also, on line 5, I believe you meant to say deceit, not deciet. ^_^ All in all, a very nice poem, Reese. We all hope to read more of your poems, in the future. Thanks for sharing, and for being the cause for my purity drop. Hahaha.
Love the feisty and saucy nature of Reesy. ^_^
Final note: Ehehe, I am known to turn those who seek to corrupt me into a pure state. So, beaware, Ressy. ^_^ My life's goal is turn Reesy into a pure baby. ^_^
Thankies much for acknowledging my ... amateur/emo work. lol
@ Kedar : Blahhh!!! 'Deceit' was truly a typo. However 'Putrify' [Putrefy] - I was completely oblivious to this spelling error. >.<
Thank you for pointing out my grammatical errors... as I sarcastically requested, Kedar. lol j/k ^_^
hehe, I am proud of my 'Dorkiness'.
I know it has nothing to do with it, but the first thing that came to mind while I was reading your poem was So Cold, by Breaking Benjamin
anyways, that's a pretty awesome poem, especialy the -destruction is bliss- lineand your avatar is awesome, too
good job.You did a good job.
Omae o Korosu!
hahahaha!! How very typical of you Reese. Dark and angry... I enjoyed reading every bit of it. Glad to see yur getting into the poetic spirit. I look forward to more crazy/emo poems of yurs in the near future.
Sig courtesy goes to : Sazuka. [Sig team]
Eheheheh, you are MOST welcome for the comments, Reese. ^_^ Yeah, we all know, it's truly a typo. Hahaha. Seriously, sorry, I know that Reese can spell "deceit." Just playing. ^_^ And, you are welcome for the correction!@ Kedar : Blahhh!!! 'Deceit' was truly a typo. However 'Putrify' [Putrefy] - I was completely oblivious to this spelling error. >.<
Thank you for pointing out my grammatical errors... as I sarcastically requested, Kedar. lol j/k ^_^
hehe, I am proud of my 'Dorkiness'.
God, wow, was I the inspiration to this poem of yours, Reese? ^_^;; And, was my interpretation correct? Or did I lick myself off my wits? ^_^ Certainly, be proud! Dorks unite, Geeks excluded!!! ^_^
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