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    The Forsaken

    The Forsaken

    Forever forsaken, forever neglected... appraise my being.
    Walking juries display fake expressions... wandering eyes,scrutinize.
    Their presences putrify my soul.
    Their hard gaze stain my every being.

    My Memories drown in deception and deceit.
    Eyes saturated in hatred.
    Let it burn and drain away my sanity.

    Jagged edges pierce and enhance my despair.
    I surrender to the anguish... I welcome the foul, crimson red sputtering from damaged wounds.
    - Destruction is bliss -
    Let the stench purify my soul and intoxicate my spirit.
    Stream away from me
    ... lift me
    ... Set me free

    In death, my flesh and existance is condemed to an eternity of despair.
    Forever forgotten... Forever forsaken.

    But my soul remains, lifted.
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    Okay I'm no poet, as you can clearly see. But this piece itself potrays a significant message. Haha, you try figuring it out... it should be simple enough.

    Feel free to comment and quote all my 'Grammatical errors'.lol.
    Quote Originally Posted by kedar
    Purity level drops 10 %!!! All thanks to Reese! (¬_&#172/¯ [Reese]! ^_^
    Reesy's life goal : "To corrupt the mind of an innocent monk" - CHECK!! lol. ^_^
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    Re: The Forsaken

    it was really good I especially liked the last line
    WHATISTHATBIGLONGBUTTONONTHEBOTTOMOFTHEKEYBOREDFOR !?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!

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    Re: The Forsaken

    OMG! ¬_¬ Oh my Divine God!!! You funny [sweet] duckie!!! ^_^

    That significant message you speak of, is rather obvious to me, you just want me to make you pure and set free from the so worldly, excruciating bondages, ne? I shall lift Reesy, and set her free. ^_^ With all Seriousness, this poems of yours is simply amazing, I love it, all throughout!! The meaning is beautifully portrayed and I can certainly sense the evil overtaking sweet Reesy's mind, hahaha. Come to me, for I shall make you good and pure again!!! Reesy gets a 10/10 for this awesome poem!!!

    Ehehehe, I have a few things to point out, though, only minor stuff.

    On line 3, I believe you meant to say putrefy, not putrify. (^_^)~~! Also, on line 5, I believe you meant to say deceit, not deciet. ^_^ All in all, a very nice poem, Reese. We all hope to read more of your poems, in the future. Thanks for sharing, and for being the cause for my purity drop. Hahaha.

    Love the feisty and saucy nature of Reesy. ^_^

    Final note: Ehehe, I am known to turn those who seek to corrupt me into a pure state. So, beaware, Ressy. ^_^ My life's goal is turn Reesy into a pure baby. ^_^

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    Re: The Forsaken

    Thankies much for acknowledging my ... amateur/emo work. lol

    @ Kedar : Blahhh!!! 'Deceit' was truly a typo. However 'Putrify' [Putrefy] - I was completely oblivious to this spelling error. >.<
    Thank you for pointing out my grammatical errors... as I sarcastically requested, Kedar. lol j/k ^_^

    hehe, I am proud of my 'Dorkiness'.

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    Re: The Forsaken

    I know it has nothing to do with it, but the first thing that came to mind while I was reading your poem was So Cold, by Breaking Benjamin

    anyways, that's a pretty awesome poem, especialy the -destruction is bliss- line and your avatar is awesome, too

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    Re: The Forsaken

    good job.You did a good job.
    Omae o Korosu!

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    Re: The Forsaken

    hahahaha!! How very typical of you Reese. Dark and angry... I enjoyed reading every bit of it. Glad to see yur getting into the poetic spirit. I look forward to more crazy/emo poems of yurs in the near future.
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    Re: The Forsaken

    Quote Originally Posted by Reese
    @ Kedar : Blahhh!!! 'Deceit' was truly a typo. However 'Putrify' [Putrefy] - I was completely oblivious to this spelling error. >.<
    Thank you for pointing out my grammatical errors... as I sarcastically requested, Kedar. lol j/k ^_^

    hehe, I am proud of my 'Dorkiness'.
    Eheheheh, you are MOST welcome for the comments, Reese. ^_^ Yeah, we all know, it's truly a typo. Hahaha. Seriously, sorry, I know that Reese can spell "deceit." Just playing. ^_^ And, you are welcome for the correction!

    God, wow, was I the inspiration to this poem of yours, Reese? ^_^;; And, was my interpretation correct? Or did I lick myself off my wits? ^_^ Certainly, be proud! Dorks unite, Geeks excluded!!! ^_^

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