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    The Forsaken Door

    I stand before,
    A Forsaken door.
    I wish to go in,
    But I can't.
    I can't bring myself,
    To open that door,
    The door that you closed off.
    For that door,
    That forsaken door,
    Leads to your heart.
    I have no right to go there,
    I own no right to enter.
    For all the damage I have done to you
    All the pain and misery.
    The only thing now that I wish to do is,
    To tell you,
    I miss you,
    I need you,
    I love you,
    But most of all,
    I am sorry,
    But,
    No matter how hard I try,
    I can't open that door,
    That Forsaken door,
    Not even for a minute.

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    Re: The Forsaken Door

    wow beautiful poem full of emotion and heart i love it it has very good quality and it comes from your heart
    i cry inside for life anew i die each time im torn in two i live for earth and die for none along comes a god who will always bring peace and tranquility

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    Oh my I love this. It kind of reminds me of how I felt after my first love broke up with me. Oh my you are too good at this keep on writing I am intrigrued but it.

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    Re: The Forsaken Door

    Sometimes it's best to leave closed doors that way. As hard as it is not to rip them open. Lovely writing.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Sorry for the late respons but thank you both . Writing as weird as it may sound keeps me sain. I love to write and I thank those who encourage it I plan to keep writing. And yes most doors are best left closed I learned that the hard way.

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    It kind of makes me want to cry. You evoke the feelings of regret and pain and longing so well it's like a direct flashback, and yet it heals. You have a wonderful gift; I look forward to what you will write in the future.
    Tears are the feelings that a heart can no longer hold.

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    Re: The Forsaken Door

    Quote Originally Posted by Angel of Darkness View Post
    It kind of makes me want to cry. You evoke the feelings of regret and pain and longing so well it's like a direct flashback, and yet it heals. You have a wonderful gift; I look forward to what you will write in the future.
    Thaank you that makes me feel so much better than i did today but i do have a lot of poems just go to my page and click on threads i have quite a few.

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