Forum Ocean

[Peach_follows]

Don't mind me.
I'm just coastin'
Riding the waves
Of a forum ocean.

I will drift away.
Once I prove devotion.
'Till I achieve my goal.
I'll keep postin'

Sick of hearing,
My own emotion.
The pain I feel.
When I read the boastin'

Rapidly increase
My hearts erosion.
Something stinks
It ain't my lotion.

I may stand at the fountain.
But I don't drink the potion.
I refuse to die.
I'll just keep coastin'.

*yeah.... this isnt good to me. But o well. At least I amazed myself with what I could rhyme with ocean.

[Lasura]

I like it... nice one, rhymes and has sarcasm in it (and I sure love sarcasm)... A really nice work... And I sure know how you feel, just though about writing something like that today, but managed to control myself...

[FLawEdmiNd]

Gosh.. such an abstract idea, (from mind to mouth) execution is awesomeful. I love and hate the slang.. shiny job girl.

[Peach_follows]

Yeah... Every time I write, I try hard to NOT incorporate slang.. I think in slang most of time... Even if I know how to articulate. Sad but true.

[RayMe]

*nods head* love the rhyming~ keep up the good word... i suk at rhyming @.@

[Peach_follows]

Thank you RayMe, "suk at rhyming"? I dunno about that, I love your work, I think you do well. And personaly the rhyming is a curse for me, I can't break away from it easily.

[!flaminghate]

hey Peach_follow,
I loved this poem and the rhyming,
I know I don't post comments much ^^;;
but I had to comment this poem.
Great work!

[HolderOfTheDarkChalice]

intresting concept lol i loved it
i tried a rym once and it sucked
but this poem is really good and i wouldnt
worry about alng becuase it is what comes
from the real you which makes it great and thats good
enough for me.

all your poems are good this is just something
else for me to enjoy when i read it and i like that