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    Forum Ocean

    Don't mind me.
    I'm just coastin'
    Riding the waves
    Of a forum ocean.

    I will drift away.
    Once I prove devotion.
    'Till I achieve my goal.
    I'll keep postin'

    Sick of hearing,
    My own emotion.
    The pain I feel.
    When I read the boastin'

    Rapidly increase
    My hearts erosion.
    Something stinks
    It ain't my lotion.

    I may stand at the fountain.
    But I don't drink the potion.
    I refuse to die.
    I'll just keep coastin'.

    *yeah.... this isnt good to me. But o well. At least I amazed myself with what I could rhyme with ocean.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Forum Ocean

    I like it... nice one, rhymes and has sarcasm in it (and I sure love sarcasm)... A really nice work... And I sure know how you feel, just though about writing something like that today, but managed to control myself...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Forum Ocean

    Gosh.. such an abstract idea, (from mind to mouth) execution is awesomeful. I love and hate the slang.. shiny job girl.
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: Forum Ocean

    Yeah... Every time I write, I try hard to NOT incorporate slang.. I think in slang most of time... Even if I know how to articulate. Sad but true.
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    Re: Forum Ocean

    *nods head* love the rhyming~ keep up the good word... i suk at rhyming @.@

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    Re: Forum Ocean

    Thank you RayMe, "suk at rhyming"? I dunno about that, I love your work, I think you do well. And personaly the rhyming is a curse for me, I can't break away from it easily.
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    Re: Forum Ocean

    hey Peach_follow,
    I loved this poem and the rhyming,
    I know I don't post comments much ^^;;
    but I had to comment this poem.
    Great work!

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    Re: Forum Ocean

    intresting concept lol i loved it
    i tried a rym once and it sucked
    but this poem is really good and i wouldnt
    worry about alng becuase it is what comes
    from the real you which makes it great and thats good
    enough for me.

    all your poems are good this is just something
    else for me to enjoy when i read it and i like that
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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