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    Four Emotions

    i've never really been into writing poems, but when i had to write one for english, i realised - it's fun! this one's my favourite so far. enjoy! ^_^

    Love is a churning thing
    Makes you want to shout and sing
    Swinging and swaying all day,
    Your fear dies away

    Hate is a burning thing
    Makes you want to hurt and heal
    Slaying and slaughtering all day
    Your spite dies away

    Jealousy is a turning thing
    Makes you want to toss and tumble
    Screaming and scolding all day
    Your envy dies away

    Regret is a learning thing
    Makes you want to break and burn
    Striking and strafing all day
    Your anger dies away

    With new emotions
    Comes new days
    With dieing emotions
    Comes new graves

    There’s always a time
    When you’ll feel all four
    But keep in mind
    You’ll always survive

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    Re: Four Emotions

    well thats kewl, i like it

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    Re: Four Emotions

    Nice... Cool... I like it.
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    Re: Four Emotions

    Yeah awesome ^^ 10/10! Nice job

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    Re: Four Emotions

    nc job there....me like....

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    Re: Four Emotions

    lol thanks! glad you all liked it! now that i've read it again, it seems rather rushed. i might re-write this one. it could be a lot better. but for now i'll just wait for my english teacher to give me my marks. hopefully her opinion's the same as rave_grip's - 10/10!

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    Re: Four Emotions

    I didn't like the end, survial is a futile thing. been better if demise was the thing ^_^.
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    Re: Four Emotions

    Quote Originally Posted by jaderabbit
    I didn't like the end, survial is a futile thing. been better if demise was the thing ^_^.
    *gasps* just the right word! i didn't like the ending myself, but i couldn't think of another word to use... ah well. thanks jaderabbit! ^_^

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