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  1. Jul 16, 2007 07:47 PM #1
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    Fragmented Soul

    There is rain on the window,
    and the kitchen light flickers dimly.
    Your favorite wind chime sounds gently in the storm,
    echoing the pangs of my heart.
    You have left me behind.
    Life, so mercurial and turbulent.
    Filled with fleeting joys and sharp pains.
    We are born fighting,
    struggling against nature... and against fate.
    Bitterness in my mouth, an unpleasant tang.
    Empty rooms fill with silence,
    as does the hollowness growing within me.
    A meal, set for two,
    cools - uneaten.
    Yet the hunger has not abated.
    Heat trails down from my eyes,
    burning in the hot salt.
    And as this liquid drains from me,
    so too, does my hope.
    I am left alone with my fragmented soul.

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.
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  2. Jul 16, 2007 08:33 PM #2
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    Re: Fragmented Soul

    Ooo this poem is good cos there was a nice flow as i read it ^^

    You used nice descriptive words that i could imagine such as the 'wind chime sounds gently in the storm'

    Hmm but not a pleasant ending lol! Poor soul... nice job
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  3. Jul 17, 2007 03:36 AM #3
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    Re: Fragmented Soul

    Yea... another nice poem... Very sad... very sad indeed... alike Peach I'm starting to get worried about the fact that all your poems are so sad...

    Well... this is another really beautifull poem. You really are good- I've loved all your poems 'till now-that's a really good thing... I also can find myself in this one... nice work... I'll be waiting forward for the next one...

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    Re: Fragmented Soul

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    alike Peach I'm starting to get worried about the fact that all your poems are so sad...
    When/If I fall in love again,i'll write love poems,mm-kay?
    I'll try and not to write emotional poems.But it's just my way of expressing feelings.

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    Re: Fragmented Soul

    Hmm...good poem ^^ i like it... it's the truth there ^^

    Sad is beautiful...keep it up~ ^^

    Love poems...i wonder how will it be like..
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