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    Garden of kumo

    This is my newest poem I have written ^-^...hope everyone likes it.


    Baby sips wine from graveyard flower pots,
    shall we drink to?

    Eyes in the back of my head help
    me see through to you.

    Baby wears a new bow in her hair,
    I've heard everything you've done.

    I loved the way you kissed my lips
    in winter time when it was so cold.

    Eye to eye,
    you said this would never ever end.

    Baby sips wine from graveyard flower pots,
    shall we drink to?

    I know everything you've said.

    I see the way you watch
    her dance, this is what I said would never ever end.

    Baby wears a new diamond ring,
    you always loved material things.

    Eye to eye,
    you said this would never ever end.

    Floating alone,
    I could be a cloud.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Ahh... this poem is so mystic and so dreamy... so sad and so angry....
    At first I didn't understand what you meant with baby, but then, at the end I think I did... I think this is a wonderful poem... enjoyed reading... I really like the way you write Kelly...
    I'll be waiting forward to the next poem by you... ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Well just incase you had it wrong. It is about a guy cheating on a girl and baby is the girl he's cheating on her with. Thank you very much for the comment on my poem ^-^ I appreciate it...and I should be working on another poem soon
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Quote Originally Posted by OfeliasFire View Post
    Well just incase you had it wrong. It is about a guy cheating on a girl and baby is the girl he's cheating on her with. Thank you very much for the comment on my poem ^-^ I appreciate it...and I should be working on another poem soon
    I got it right!!!! ^^ yay!!!!!!!!!!!!
    This proves it's really a great work... it's quite confusing and difficult to understand but in the end you tell what you want to tell.

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    I got it right!!!! ^^ yay!!!!!!!!!!!!
    This proves it's really a great work... it's quite confusing and difficult to understand but in the end you tell what you want to tell.

    I try to make all my work a little hard to understand..because I think it's fun watching people guess ^-^. In the process though not many people are able to comprehend the meaning and they get lost. All in all though I am glad you got it
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Very good! When I read your title, I thought you meant kumo = spiders. I totally forgot that it means cloud too, LOL. I liked this poem, keep up the good work. ^_^


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    Re: Garden of kumo

    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Very good! When I read your title, I thought you meant kumo = spiders. I totally forgot that it means cloud too, LOL. I liked this poem, keep up the good work. ^_^
    Nice one lol.
    Thank you very much I am glad you enjoyed it.
    I have another poem up called killing dusk...if ya wanna check it out ^-^
    Dear Dinah...

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