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    A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    A Genius In The Making
    Younger Meji, wrapped in cloth..
    .. No one could foresee his skin so soft..

    A little boy born with brown hair
    as he grows up he'll take every dare
    He cannot be beat, this seems to be true
    Laughs at the pain that has always ensued

    Mid-life screen, the boy acts foolish
    Elementary school term, the boy seems abolished
    Never fitting in, medication taking over
    Boy reacts to situations, his emotions not sober.

    Within the boy lies a genius at hand
    He cannot live like this, lost is his ability to withstand
    Determined to be recognized ha cannot lose
    Medication now gone, his emotions short fuse

    Learning control, teenage age..
    Meji tries to suppress, his undying rage
    Having it rough, things seem not right
    As tough as he is, he's never won the fight.

    Sixteen years old, Karate has helped
    The beast inside, beaten it whelps
    Mellow now, and sleepy in class
    Meji answers regardless, determined to pass.

    Revered by some, he's made his path
    Can't look back he's happy with that.
    I.Q. One twenty-one
    All he wants now is to have some fun.

    Earning his friends, it's been so hard
    Given his past it's been surprising so far
    Like a phoenix revived he's back from the ash
    Won't get rid of him so quickly, it's not his time to pass

    Death seeks him out its happened before
    Can't seem to shake him, the only battle he scores
    One, two, three, no four. Time's he was suppose to die.
    God keeps watch over his genius, must have something important for this guy

    Fallen in love with a girl named Lauren, he tickles her nose.
    Keeping in his mind that he thinks she knows.
    Undecided on what to do he wavers to tell
    His feeling to her he can't seem to spell

    Genius in the making has so much doubt
    He suffers so much trying to figure life out
    He wonders why people are so troublesome
    He wonders why life is oh so bothersome

    Still for that girl he continues to live
    Ready to protect her when his time comes to give
    His life is rich, probably the best to be had
    He's not rich, not poor but in love it's obvious to be said

    Love is a great thing love is to be had..
    Once he was stupid just to think it was a fad.
    Chased before just to be put down
    This time he thinks he's found solid ground

    Finally the genius is coming to an end
    His life finally coming to a bend
    Death failed in his ability to take
    His determination to have the dream he made

    Finally recognized. Finally heard.
    His soul finds solace in watching only one girl
    He's found his purpose he's found his peace..
    He's found what it is, what being a genius truly means.


    Yeah yeah, it's a love poem. I had to do it, it's actually my life story up to this point. ^_^ I guess with some guitar and a proper beat it could be a song but it was meant for a poem >_< A... really long poem >_<


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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    i really liked reading your poem^^ keep up the good workD
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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    Quote Originally Posted by blackrose92 View Post
    i really liked reading your poem^^ keep up the good workD
    Thanks, I'm really proud of how it came out as I read it. I was worried that with those words I used that were similar but not rhyming would throw the rhythm off or that the "One, two, three, no four. Time's he was suppose to die." would throw off rhythm as well but, It actually made it that much more better... Ohh, shit.. That was bad grammer "More better" That poem must've taken it out of me xD


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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    That was a very good poem.I didn't like some of the rhyming,I find it to be off a bit.
    But,it was,overall pretty good.

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.

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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    Yeah, as I stated some of it I thought would be off. (I may have read it in a different rhythm that made it sound good)


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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    Man, I wrote a poem that was about a fourth the size of this, and was told it was long... I disagreed, wishing I could've shown them an example of what "long" truely was. And here it is...

    So genius eh? I get annoyed by that title when its self proclaimed (even if its a fact)... I find it to be cocky, but thats because I have a friend who refers to himself as genius. Meh...

    Anyway... I really liked the bulk of the poem (I must say I preferred the first 7 stanzas)... But there were some sentences I thought were worded funny. And a few rhymes that didnt quite flow well... But nothing that would really tarnish the luster of the poem overall.
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    Re: A Genius In The Making.(please comment)

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Man, I wrote a poem that was about a fourth the size of this, and was told it was long... I disagreed, wishing I could've shown them an example of what "long" truely was. And here it is...

    So genius eh? I get annoyed by that title when its self proclaimed (even if its a fact)... I find it to be cocky, but thats because I have a friend who refers to himself as genius. Meh...

    Anyway... I really liked bulk of the poem (I must say I preferred the first 7 stanzas)... But there were some sentences I thought were worded funny. And a few rhymes that didnt quite flow well... But nothing that would really tarnish the luster of the poem overall.
    Well, I have been told I'm a cocky person, at the same time the title isnt completely self-proclaimed in my case. I'm just 19 points off of Genius on the IQ chart and my teachers tell me I have quite the large mind and that they think I don't operate to my full potential so I guess I could be considered a genius but I'm not going to boast it >_<


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