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    A Girl

    A Girl

    She smiles in the middle of the night
    Dreaming about his gentle and caressing touch
    Remembering the sensations she felt
    When he would lift his hand to her cheek and kiss her so tenderly

    It’s the sensation that makes her knees go weak
    The same one that made her long for more
    But also made her want hide inside of herself
    Because she was afraid of the love she felt

    But no matter what happened, he was there for her
    Always held her close when she would cry
    Was sweet and loving in every single way
    Yet in the end it was her who had walked away

    Two years she was with him and they fought all the time
    Yet those two years were the best she’s had
    Not because they loved each other so much
    But just because she was with him

    He was her everything, her life, love and world
    Yet she didn’t know how to show it
    And was afraid that what everyone else said
    Wasn’t a lie, but the truth

    Instead of believing the one she loved
    She believed the ones she never really thought of
    And their relationship crashed and burned
    As she held up her hands and walked out the door

    Does she regret it
    Wish she could change it
    Want to go back in time
    And right the wrongs of her life

    Her answer was no
    Not because she doesn’t regret it or want to change it
    But for the simple fact that
    It helped her become who she is today

    A young sixteen year old girl who has been to hell and back
    But still stands strong and is slowly healing from a past so black
    Wondering what’s to come and leaving the past behind
    A girl with a wisdom far beyond her time
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Re: A Girl

    First of all, that was a well written free-verse poem i have come across so far. My favorite stanza is the last one, it rhymed perfectly. You are a pretty good writer keep up the good work, you'll get very far in poetry writing.

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    curious kitty

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    Re: A Girl

    I love this poem....for the first time I have read a poem that had explained me so well....I cried...the first poem to ever make me do that....you have a real gift for writing poems please don't stop I love your writting. The part that made cry was
    Two years she was with him and they fought all the time
    Yet those two years were the best she’s had
    Not because they loved each other so much
    But just because she was with him

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    Re: A Girl

    wow..i liked it,i cant explain myself for liking it,LOL,i like the whole poem itself..especially this part..

    He was her everything, her life, love and world
    Yet she didn’t know how to show it
    And was afraid that what everyone else said
    Wasn’t a lie, but the truth

    Instead of believing the one she loved
    She believed the ones she never really thought of
    And their relationship crashed and burned
    As she held up her hands and walked out the door

    Does she regret it
    Wish she could change it
    Want to go back in time
    And right the wrongs of her life

    Her answer was no
    Not because she doesn’t regret it or want to change it
    But for the simple fact that
    It helped her become who she is today

    by the way,really really great job..^_^
    sometimes i wish i never existed
    -heartless.DY-025

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