Glass of tea

A glass of tea and me...

One... two... I pour the sugar in,
I watch them slowly sink.
At the same time my mind soars,
Back to my past then here in present.

Time has passed by like the grains of sugar,
Going by slowly then picking up speed as gravity pulls.
Many things have happened in between those times,
Some are sweet like the sugar and some bitter like the tea.

Born pure and white like water.
Then I am poured into a glass by my parents,
Others, like my friends, teacher and my love are the tea bag,
Coloring and shaping, into the glass, what I am now...

Life without happiness,
Tastes like the bitter tea with no sugar.
My life so far has been blessed,
Little spoons full of sugar are added in my glass by them.

Then a stir was given,
To mix all into one.
Done by my experiences,
All this to make a perfect glass of tea.

But, like they say... nothing is perfect...at least my tea is presentable... -Laughs-

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PS; the laughing is a part of the poem :p

Hmmm so whats this one to you guys? ^^ any suggestion to go with...

well think this one lacks of the usage of better words or more powerful ones... well i'll redo again someday... ^^

Gosh I hope this doesn't have grammar mistakes (I fixed this up kinda with my grammar check thingy :D:) ^^

Well indeed it could use some "stronger" expressions, I'm sure you'll be able to fix it up later and maybe improve the idea of you being tea and you'll deffinetely will have something more to put in this tea... hmm... some milk... maybe a bit of ice... ^^

I really liked how you compared yourself to tea in this one... it's very interesting. Something very different ^^ And it's interesting to read it and understand what you mean with this metaphor :D:

Nice work Ray. And I'm waiting forward for more as always ^^

*bangs my head to the wall * gah i forgot to mention you helped in making in this poem... im so sorry Lasura.. :/ *bangs a few more times*

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Well indeed it could use some "stronger" expressions, I'm sure you'll be able to fix it up later and maybe improve the idea of you being tea and you'll deffinetely will have something more to put in this tea... hmm... some milk... maybe a bit of ice... ^^

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Hmmm good idea... i'll try and see what methaphore would go with that... 2... :) thx :D:

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I really liked how you compared yourself to tea in this one... it's very interesting. Something very different ^^ And it's interesting to read it and understand what you mean with this metaphor

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*bows* doumo arigatou

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Nice work Ray. And I'm waiting forward for more as always ^^

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sure...as long as this head of mine spin its gears... there will always be more ;) and thats a promise... but it'll have to wait thought...darn gears need some oil on it -.-

lol ^^ It's ok silly :p I help cuz I want to and not cuz I need my name by your poem (I get it there being the first one to comment :D:)

And I know what you mean... I've been having a bad 3 months long writers block :D:

You're welcome ^^ :p

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really cool poem ray .... but is it not uaslay cup of tea XD sorry.... but really cool poem

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thank you... hmm.. no i don't drink my tea in a cup.. i use glass.. :D: so i could see the sugar go round and round as i stir it :)

I am soooo thirsty now.

Anyway, this wasn't your best... But, I rather enjoyed the originality. Mataphores are always fun. I'd be interested in knowing how you mustered up the inspiration from this. Were you really making tea and thinking about life? If so... It'd be cool to make a series like that. Just comparing your life to random things. (hmmmm... looks over at the telephone) Gosh, there's so many weird things that can represent life when you really think about it.

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Were you really making tea and thinking about life?

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well i was inspired when i was making a tea... i watch the sugar slowly going down my tall glass...lol ^^

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Just comparing your life to random things. (hmmmm... looks over at the telephone) Gosh, there's so many weird things that can represent life when you really think about it.

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true ^^ too many... but some is easier and some is not.. :p

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Anyway, this wasn't your best...

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yea...i kinda make it as fast as i could.. :laugh:

The words have a real solid meaning to them...............
I have never read a poem with this title and I am not sure the words correspond to the title correctly
But overall, nicely done!