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Gone
Back in my life
I used to be so happy
But,don't ask me why
I became so ugly
Go back in time
And try to find the answer
But don't hope to find
What is now out of time
All I see is a stranger who died
Out of the blue
You break into the silence
And all that we need me and you
Is spiritual guidance
Now I can see
Our love was always dying
And today I regret
All the joy that we had
All I feel is emptiness instead
I used to be so happy
I used to be so happy
Now it's gone, so long
Turn of the tide
I feel it coming back to me
Made up my mind
You will never be close to me
Back in my life
I used to be so happy
Now I'm breaking the back
Of what is breaking my neck
All I want is tenderness instead...
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Re: Gone
The poem's message is kind of unclear to me. Are you talking about how your personality use to be? It was a good poem and very well written!
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Re: Gone
The poems good enough but don't repeat sentences alright,you should think of other sentences to fill it up to make it more better...Just my suggestion...goodluck on your next poem...
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Re: Gone
im talking about how much my life has turned into hell after some time with some girl,back in my life,and hom much i regret for me and her together in that time...
Last edited by emptyus; Sep 15, 2006 at 04:13 AM.
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