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    Angry Gone

    Back in my life
    I used to be so happy
    But,don't ask me why
    I became so ugly
    Go back in time
    And try to find the answer
    But don't hope to find
    What is now out of time
    All I see is a stranger who died

    Out of the blue
    You break into the silence
    And all that we need me and you
    Is spiritual guidance
    Now I can see
    Our love was always dying
    And today I regret
    All the joy that we had
    All I feel is emptiness instead

    I used to be so happy
    I used to be so happy
    Now it's gone, so long

    Turn of the tide
    I feel it coming back to me
    Made up my mind
    You will never be close to me
    Back in my life
    I used to be so happy
    Now I'm breaking the back
    Of what is breaking my neck
    All I want is tenderness instead...

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    Re: Gone

    The poem's message is kind of unclear to me. Are you talking about how your personality use to be? It was a good poem and very well written!

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    Re: Gone

    The poems good enough but don't repeat sentences alright,you should think of other sentences to fill it up to make it more better...Just my suggestion...goodluck on your next poem...

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    Re: Gone

    im talking about how much my life has turned into hell after some time with some girl,back in my life,and hom much i regret for me and her together in that time...
    Last edited by emptyus; Sep 15, 2006 at 04:13 AM. Reason: grammar

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