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    Gone out for a walk

    She's gone out for a walk,
    there is no need for talk
    There was no emotion on her face,
    as she went to an unknown place.
    I don't know what it's like,
    when there's nothing left inside,
    But she left without a word,
    out of this cruel world.
    She opened her wings and flew
    towards the light,
    In her heart,everything
    seemed to be all right,as she left me behind.

    Now,as time passes by
    I promise myself I won't cry,
    no matter how hard I try,
    these tears just won't dry.
    I know I should've have kept you closer,
    On that fatefull day of October.
    I've let go of your hands,
    now it's too late to make amends.
    The only thing that's left inside,
    is the memory of your smile,
    from the first day we met,
    which I won't ever regret.

    She's gone out for a walk,
    there was no need for talk.
    Her face was filled with emotion,
    that keeps my heart in motion.
    As I lie in my bed,I toss this nightmare
    In the depths of my mind,where it belongs,
    Just right there...

    She's gone out for a walk...

    Hey guys! This is a poem I wrote some time ago [maybe a year old,dunno xD] and just found it in the depths of my PC so I've decided to post it.
    Feel free to comment,and critic! Thanks in advance !

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    Re: Gone out for a walk

    I LOVED it! The ending tied everything all together, kinda made me want to cry though.

    Death is as generation is, a composition of like elements, and a decompostion into the same.

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    Re: Gone out for a walk

    Thank you very much Moose !
    I was in a real bad mood back then when I wrote this,I was very sad.Judging by your comment,I guess I transfered my emotions through my poem.
    I'm sorry,if it made you sad too.
    Thank you again for your nice comment !

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