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    Good times

    ''Evrything seems to be so fine''
    '' evry minute of life''
    '' My mind can only think of''
    '' the things i could enjoy through time''
    '' single moments i could cherish with friends and family''
    '' did perish but stayid in my mind like an eternal fantasy''
    '' laughs,love, hugs all things shared through each other's minds''
    '' like giving a sign''
    '' that theres no leave''
    '' all of those good memories and times u need to keep''
    '' for eternity''



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: Good times

    i thought the poem was going to be about jj from good times..........................................

    but it was a pretty good poem you could have made it longer..............and some of the lines ended in a weird rhyme scheme.............but other than that it was a pretty good poem..................

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    Re: Good times

    this poem you have made Baal is good.
    but i advice you to somewhat get rid of too much use of ""(quotation marks)
    also, i advice you to keep in mind of using stanzas and length of each line.
    Practice makes perfect.
    keep on writing poems as you like. ^^

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    Re: Good times

    something go wrong it should be 3 times longer.



    perdoname michelle!

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    Re: Good times

    don't make them too long.
    and the stanzas should be about the same length. the quotes "" you could do without.

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    Re: Good times

    Quote Originally Posted by fayt lingod
    don't make them too long.
    and the stanzas should be about the same length. the quotes "" you could do without.
    yeah i did with the other poem and it dint cut out.



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    Re: Good times

    Every minute is part of our miserable lives. nice poem man, keep it up.

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